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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement? v.3

It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v. 3
Maintenance of historic structures is a much-discussed issue among experts, and these should be protected regardless of incurring expenses. I agree with this viewpoint because it not only connects a person to the glorious older architectural era but also benefits to a nation in the form of a tourist destination. To begin with, the old buildings should be maintained and protected even if governments have to spend a hefty amount in this process because such structures connect people to the ancient lifestyle and activities. For example, the government of Punjab state in India has been spending one million Indian Rupees every year since 1947 to maintain the Jalianwala Bagh, in Amristsar, Punjab which provides how our freedom fighters sacrifices their lives. Therefore, if people visit such ancient places, they can get to know about the facts that were unknown to them earlier, and this chain continues. So, preservation and maintenance of these monuments become essential. Moreover, a nation will get benefitted in the form of tourism if valuable ancient buildings are maintained properly. While visiting such places, tourists have to purchase tickets, and this collected money can be utilized in other development purposes by governments. Thereby, the economy of nations increases by maintaining the old structures. To illustrate, to visit the Taj Mahal, overseas visitors must buy an entry ticket before entering the monument premises. Consequently, provincial as well as federal governments are collecting a huge amount by selling the tickets only. Hence, the maintenance of older buildings becomes significant, even it is expensive. To summarize, I believe that the older constructed sites should be prevented and preserved because these link the public to the past. Furthermore, these structures also help to sustain the economy of a nation.
Maintenance of historic
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structures
is a much-discussed issue among experts, and these should
be protected
regardless of incurring expenses. I
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agree
with this viewpoint
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it not
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only
connects a person to the glorious older architectural era
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also
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in the form of a tourist destination.

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with, the
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old
buildings should
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and protected even if
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governments
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have to
spend a hefty amount in this process
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because
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structures
connect
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people
to the ancient lifestyle and activities.
For example
, the
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government
of Punjab state in India has been spending one million Indian Rupees every year since 1947 to maintain the
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Jalianwala
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Bagh
, in
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Amristsar
, Punjab which provides how our freedom fighters sacrifices their
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lives
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, if
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people
visit such ancient places, they can
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to know about the facts that were unknown to them earlier, and this chain continues.
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So
, preservation and maintenance of these monuments become essential.

Moreover
, a
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nation
will
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get
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benefitted
in the form of tourism if valuable ancient buildings
are maintained
properly
. While visiting such places, tourists
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have to
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purchase
tickets, and this collected money can
be utilized
in other development purposes by
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governments
. Thereby, the economy of
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nations
increases by maintaining the
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old
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structures
. To illustrate, to visit the Taj Mahal, overseas visitors
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must
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buy
an entry ticket
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before
entering the monument premises.
Consequently
, provincial
as well
as federal
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governments
are collecting a huge amount by selling the tickets
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only
.
Hence
, the maintenance of older buildings becomes significant, even it is expensive.

To summarize
, I believe that the older constructed sites should be
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prevented
and preserved
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because
these link the public to the past.
Furthermore
, these
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structures
also
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help
to sustain the economy of a
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nation
.
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IELTS essay It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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