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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance sports or music, and others are not. However, itvis sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance sports or music, and others are not. However, itvis sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 2
There is a controversy among people that it is god gift to the people who are born with certain talents in sports or music and some are not. While, some believe that anyone can be taught to be a good player as well as musician. I opine with the latter view. Both the views as well as my opinion are discussed below. First view of individuals says that which children are born with a capability they do not need to do practice for other activities. These with born skills are unique and should be separated from others who are not because they influence the others and make bad effects on them. These people get direct chance to perform in front of others and got the best opportunities. They do not need to clear any level or step of career to be famous. For example, a survey conducted reveals that in recent years number of children get chance to show their talent on an international level without any efforts such as Google boy. So, that is why people believe only inborn talent. On the other hand, which children are not born with talent they can be taught because sometimes they are not aware about their skills and need time to understand the situation. Sometimes, which people are not able to work, but doing regular practice they can be good in their performance and there should be good trainer who motivate them along with responsibility. For example, an article tells that slum people are taught by teachers of city about sports, music, and many more to make them good and show their skills. So, that is the other factor that everyone can get coaching regarding different skills. To recapitulate, my view is every child has different talent, but not aware about it. So people should help them to find and make it more clear because youngsters develop the nation.
There is a controversy among
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that it is god gift to the
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people
who
are born
with certain
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talents
in sports or music and
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some
are not. While,
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some
believe that anyone can
be taught
to be a
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good
player
as well
as musician. I opine with the latter
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view
. Both the
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views
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as well as
my opinion
are discussed
below.

First
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view
of individuals says that which children
are born
with a capability they do not need to do practice for
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other
activities. These with born
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skills
are unique and should
be separated
from others who are not
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because
they influence the others and
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make
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bad
effects on them. These
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people
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get
direct chance to perform in front of others and
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got
the best opportunities. They do not need to
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clear
any level or step of career to be
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famous
.
For example
, a survey conducted reveals that in recent years number of children
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get
chance to
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show
their
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talent
on an international level without any efforts such as Google boy.
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,
that is
why
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people
believe
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only
inborn talent.

On the
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other
hand, which children are not born with
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talent
they can
be taught
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because
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sometimes
they are not aware about their
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skills
and need time to understand the situation.
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Sometimes
, which
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people
are not able to work,
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but
doing regular practice they can be
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good
in their performance and there should be
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good
trainer who motivate them along with responsibility.
For example
, an article
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tells
that slum
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people
are taught
by teachers of city about sports, music, and
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many
more to
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make
them
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good
and
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show
their
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skills
.
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So
,
that is
the
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other
factor that everyone can
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get
coaching regarding
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different
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skills
.

To recapitulate, my
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view
is every child has
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different
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talent
,
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but
not aware about it.
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So
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people
should
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help them to find
and
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make
it more
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clear
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because
youngsters develop the nation.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance sports or music, and others are not. However, itvis sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 2

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317 words
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