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It is generally believed that people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

It is generally believed that people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 1
How can be talented? Some argue that this is those who are born with talent; however, opponents of this opinion point out that those who are trained to become skillfull. In my opinion, I strongly believe that even though one is skillfull, without a proper training he cannot be successful. On the hand, one who considers children born with skill would be successful. This is because as they have innate abilities: singing, painting and acting, it is very easy to understand the nuances of these skills in details. By contrast, if any children who did not have talents, this training would be hard to give positive results. Take music classes in schools as an example, where several aspirant studies there, but most of them fail to become successful because of inborn talents. Thus, it is believed that only skilled students acquire a great achievement after getting a proper training. On the other hand, despite the above beliefs, opponents of this consider that no-one does successful unless they get enough experience and training. A recent research has shown that most of the great achievers in the world are not born talented; their hard work made them succeed in various fields. By contrast, if a famous skilled person does not undergo any training to improve his skill, he would lose his fame later on as he may not be competent enough to outperform newcomers. By way of conclusion, while many say that innate ability is far more important than training to be successful, others strongly back that the opposite is the true. It is predicted whoever talented be trained by professionals to chase their dreams.
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who
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skillfull
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believe that
even though
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, without a proper
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he cannot be successful.

On the hand, one
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who
considers children born with
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skill
would be
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successful
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because
as they have innate abilities: singing, painting and acting, it is
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easy to understand the nuances of these
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skills
in
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details
. By contrast, if any children
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who
did not have talents, this
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training
would be
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hard
to give
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positive
results. Take music classes in schools as an example, where several aspirant studies there,
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but
most of them fail to become
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successful
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because
of inborn talents.
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, it
is believed
that
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only
skilled students acquire a great achievement after getting a proper training.

On the other hand
, despite the above beliefs, opponents of this consider that no-one does
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successful
unless they
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get
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enough
experience and
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training
. A recent research has shown that most of the great achievers in the world are not born talented; their
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hard
work made them succeed in various fields. By contrast, if
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famous
skilled person does not undergo any
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training
to
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improve
his
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skill
, he would lose his fame later on as he may not be competent
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enough
to outperform newcomers.

By way of conclusion, while
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many
say that innate ability is far more
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important
than
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training
to be
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successful
, others
strongly
back that the opposite is the true. It
is predicted
whoever talented
be trained
by professionals to chase their dreams.
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IELTS essay It is generally believed that people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. v. 1

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