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It is easy to make friend online than to befriend in real life v.1

It is easy to make friend online than to befriend in real life v. 1
Most people nowadays show less interest in having a buddy in reality. They prefer making friends with people on the screen who will not betray or lie to them. And it is believed that “It’s easier to make friends online than to befriend in real life”. First and foremost, it is much easier to become whoever you want to be on the internet. People with less confidence can communicate with others easily since they can hide their own identity. Online friends may not even know how their pals look or how they sound, which is a definite bonus for introverts. People can feel free to express their mind and ideas through a partner whom they may never meet. It’s easy to start a conversation, even if you don’t know what to say, let alone less pressure as it’s not a face-to-face interaction. People may also be able to confide in this individual than someone in real life. Moreover, most of social media users want to make friends away from their careers, religions, or races and so on. They are in hungry for building up closeness with people from different backgrounds. By the profile of somebody online, it is easier to learn about the other person and to select out your kind of people. You can choose whoever you want with matching interests or ways of thoughts. And approaching or ignoring someone is not taken as mean or harsh, since they don’t even know who you are. With the help of technology, the Internet has become accessible to every person on Earth. So people can connect with a wider range of people from every country, who are willing to share the same interests. It is true that people living in small towns or villages would find it somewhat difficult to make friends in real life, but it is not a problem when you have a social media account. By scrolling your social media feed, you can come across about ten people in one minute. So it is not hard to find a friend. Also, some of the most meaningful relationships have been proven to be started online. Online friendship through a long time can have the stuff that makes a real friendship. Since friendship is about sharing interests, wisdom and emotional support, it can blossom without physical interaction. Those “hugs”, “going to a movie”, “walk-in the park” can build a relationship, but they are no longer the must-required things in this modern world. In all, finding a friend online is always easier than in reality. It depends on people to choose the right person who fit them and be necessarily cautious as you don’t know who you are talking to.
Most
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people
nowadays
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show
less
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interest
in having a buddy in reality. They prefer making
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friends
with
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people
on the screen
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who
will not betray or lie to them. And it
is believed
that “It’s
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easier
to
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make
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friends
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online
than to befriend in
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real
life”.

First
and foremost, it is much
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easier
to become whoever you want to be on the internet.
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People
with less confidence can communicate with others
easily
since they can
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hide
their
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own
identity.
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Online
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friends
may not even
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know
how their pals look or how they sound, which is a
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definite
bonus for introverts.
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People
can feel free to express their mind and
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ideas
through a partner whom they may never
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meet
. It’s easy to
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start
a conversation, even if you don’t
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know
what to say,
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let
alone less pressure as it’s not a face-to-face interaction.
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People
may
also
be able to confide in this
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individual
than someone in
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real
life.

Moreover
,
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most of social
media users want to
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make
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friends
away from their careers, religions, or races and
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so
on. They are in hungry for building up closeness with
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people
from
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different
backgrounds. By the profile of somebody
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online
, it is
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easier
to learn about the other person and to select out your kind of
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people
. You can choose whoever you want with matching
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interests
or ways of thoughts. And approaching or ignoring someone is not taken as mean or harsh, since they don’t even
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know
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who
you are.

With the
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help
of technology, the Internet has become accessible to every person on Earth.
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So
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people
can connect with a wider range of
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people
from every country,
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who
are willing to share the same
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interests
. It is true that
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people
living in
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small
towns or villages would find it somewhat difficult to
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make
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friends
in
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real
life,
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but
it is not a problem when you have a social media account. By scrolling your social media feed, you can
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come
across about ten
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people
in one minute.
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So
it is not
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hard
to find a friend.

Also
,
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some
of the most meaningful relationships have
been proven
to be
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started
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online
.
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Online
friendship through a long time can have the stuff that
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makes
a
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real
friendship. Since friendship is about sharing
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interests
, wisdom and emotional support, it can blossom without physical interaction. Those “hugs”, “going to a movie”, “walk-in the park” can build a relationship,
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but
they are no longer the
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must
-required things in this modern world.

In all, finding a
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friend
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online
is always
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easier
than in reality. It depends on
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people
to choose the right person
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who
fit them and be
necessarily
cautious as you don’t
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know
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who
you are talking to.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is easy to make friend online than to befriend in real life v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
449 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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