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It is difficult to experience a country fully as a tourist in a hotel. To appreciate and understand a country, a person needs to live there. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is difficult to experience a country fully as a tourist in a hotel. To appreciate and understand a country, a person needs to live there. v. 1
People are travelling more today than ever before. However, short term visitors simply do not have the time needed to fully understand a country. I agree that to truly experience and appreciate a country a person needs to live there for a period longer than that of the typical tourist. This will be shown by looking at how knowledge of a country’s customs and language, two cornerstones to understanding any nation in depth, requires time to be developed. For one, to understand a country’s values and beliefs, a person must be exposed to its customs, a process that demands time. For example, while living in the UAE, I had the privilege of attending a local wedding, a traditional camel race, and a birthday with my Emirati friend. In the cool of the late evening at each of these events, guests were served spiced camel meat and medjool dates, staple foods that sustained generations of people in such barren landscape. Had I only been visiting the UAE as a tourist, I would not have had the time needed to have such insights into Emirati cuisine and lifestyle. Thus, living in a country is a necessary precursor to fully experience it. Language is yet another avenue through which so much understanding can be derived. While living in China, for instance, I managed to pick up the basics of the Chinese language. Among other things, this allowed me to see that Chinese culture puts extreme emphasis on thr face. For instance, in China it is the custom to refuse a gift several times before accepting. As I could only make this fundamental observation after committing time to learning the language, it is clear that a country really does need to be lived in to be fully appreciated. To conclude, although tourists receive a basic introduction to a region and its peoples, thorough understanding of a country is best achieved when one commits to living there.
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today
than ever
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before
.
However
, short term visitors
simply
do not have the
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time
needed to
fully
understand a
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country
. I
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agree
that to
truly
experience and appreciate a
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country
a person needs to
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live
there for a period longer than that of the typical tourist. This will
be shown
by looking at how knowledge of a
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country’s
customs and language, two cornerstones to understanding any nation in depth, requires
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time
to
be developed
.

For one, to understand a
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country’s
values and beliefs, a person
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be exposed
to its customs, a process that demands
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
For example
, while
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living
in the UAE, I had the privilege of attending a local wedding, a traditional camel race, and a birthday with my
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Emirati
friend. In the cool of the late evening at each of these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
, guests
were served
spiced camel meat and
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medjool
dates, staple foods that sustained generations of
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people
in such barren landscape. Had I
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only
been visiting the UAE as a tourist, I would not have had the
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time
needed to have such insights into
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Emirati
cuisine and lifestyle.
Thus
,
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living
in a
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country
is a necessary precursor to
fully
experience it.

Language is
yet
another avenue through which
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so
much understanding can
be derived
. While
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living
in China,
for instance
, I managed to pick up the basics of the Chinese language. Among other things, this
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allowed
me to
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see
that Chinese culture puts extreme emphasis on
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thr
face.
For instance
, in China it is the custom to refuse a gift several
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times
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before
accepting. As I could
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only
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make
this fundamental observation after committing
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time
to learning the language, it is
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clear
that a
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country
really
does need to be
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lived
in to be
fully
appreciated.

To conclude
, although tourists receive a basic introduction to a region and its peoples, thorough understanding of a
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country
is best achieved when one commits to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
there.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay It is difficult to experience a country fully as a tourist in a hotel. To appreciate and understand a country, a person needs to live there. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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