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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today's world? v.1

It is better to save money than to spend it. How far Is saving more important than spending in today's world? v. 1
It is said that saving money is considered as a wiser choice compared to spending it. I partly agree with this statement and in this modern world, saving the large amount of money for the future use is advantageous in some situations. On the one hand, saving money is a sensible precaution as the future is uncertain. For example, an individual might accidentally encounter unemployment, ill health or car accidents at some point in life. When these unexpected situations occur, it is essential to have some savings money to pay the daily household bills, to purchase medicines or to pay for hospital fees and such money usually is in large amount which is only accumulated through saving for a long period of time. On the other hand, some daily expenses are unavoidable such as housing, food, clothes and entertainment. In addition, people should treat themselves nicely by spending a great deal of income on vacation packages or high-end services once in a while. However, in my view, having a habit of saving money is more worthwhile then spending it in this ever-changing world. People who save more money than spend it tend to be self-disciplined. They can resist well to the temptation of attractive advertisements and stick to their savings plan. In that case, these people will definitely achieve the goals like buying a new house or a car. In conclusion, I believe that saving money is wiser than spending it due to various purposes to avoid uncertainty and accomplish bigger objectives.
It
is said
that
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saving
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money
is considered
as a wiser choice compared to
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spending
it. I partly
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agree
with this statement and in this modern world,
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saving
the large amount of
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money
for the future
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use
is advantageous in
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some
situations.

On the one hand,
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saving
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money
is a sensible precaution as the future is uncertain.
For example
, an individual might
accidentally
encounter unemployment, ill health or car accidents at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
point in life. When these unexpected situations occur, it is essential to have
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some
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "savings'" or "saving's"?
savings
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money
to pay the daily household bills, to
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purchase
medicines or to pay for hospital fees and such
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money
usually
is in large amount which is
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only
accumulated through
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saving
for a long period of time.
On the other hand
,
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some
daily expenses are unavoidable such as housing, food, clothes and entertainment.
In addition
,
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people
should treat themselves
nicely
by
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spending
a great deal of income on vacation packages or high-
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end
services once in a while.

However
, in my view, having a habit of
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saving
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money
is more worthwhile
Did you mean "than"?
then
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spending
it in this ever-changing world.
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People
who save more
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money
than spend it tend to be self-disciplined. They can resist well to the temptation of attractive advertisements and stick to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
savings
plan.
In that case
, these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will definitely achieve the goals like buying a new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
or a car.

In conclusion
, I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
saving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
is wiser than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spending
it due to various purposes to avoid uncertainty and accomplish bigger objectives.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is better to save money than to spend it. How far Is saving more important than spending in today's world? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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