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It is better for student at university to live far away grom home than to live at home whit their parents.To what extent do you agree or dis agree whit this statement?

It is better for student at university to live far away grom home than to live at home whit their parents. p5RE0
Today, most high school graduates go to university and it is believe that pupils live far away from their parents instead of living with them. I completly agree with this statement. Nowdays, most pupils continue their education and some of them are forced to move to a more remote area or even another city and get away from their families. I think this is a good idea because it allow students to enter adult life and learn and experience new things. For example, cooking, doing house chore, shoping, and so on. Inaddition, living in a new city can pupils new cultule and make more friends. In my opinion, this cause student to learn how to live and to live independently, and this cause them to gain self-confidence in life. On the other hand, many student like living with their families and can not live without them. They do not like to lose friends and enter a new place where they do not know anyone. Few pubils are afraid of being alone and this causes them depression and they may not perform well in the university and can not vommunicate with others and this will cause them to leave the university and their future will change completely. In vonclusion, it is true that living away from home has many difficulties, such as being alone, but in my view this is an opportunity for students to enter real life and live independently.
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completly
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agree
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to
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move
to a more remote area or even another city and
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get
away from their families. I
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students
to enter adult life and learn and experience
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new
things.
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, cooking, doing
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house
chore,
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shoping
, and
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on.
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in a
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new
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and
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student
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independently
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cause
them to gain self-confidence in life.

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student
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with their families and can not
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live
without them. They do not like to lose friends and enter a
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new
place where they do not know anyone. Few
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pubils
are afraid of being alone and this
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causes
them
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depression and
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vommunicate
with others and this will
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cause
them to
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leave
the university and their future will
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change
completely.

In
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vonclusion
, it is true that
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living
away from home has
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many
difficulties, such as being alone,
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but
in my view this is an opportunity for
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students
to enter real life and
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live
independently
.
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IELTS essay It is better for student at university to live far away grom home than to live at home whit their parents.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
240 words
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