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It is better for a country to spend money for skills training and vocational training with practical work ( e.g. car maintenance, hairdressing ) than university education. To what extend do u agree or disagree?

It is better for a country to spend money for skills training and vocational training with practical work ( e. g. car maintenance, hairdressing ) than university education. 2baqb
Every country contributes a significant amount of money to maintain world-class education system. However, in recent decades, the number of nations is enhancing university level courses, but they are ignoring the vocational courses. To my mind, it is better to distribute the money equally on both types of courses. To begin with, every country requires young talent in fields such as engineering, research, medicine. This helps a country to grow at a steep path and be competitive in the world market. For example, some countries such as USA, UK are the acting as a global leader because they are equipped with cutting edge technologies and highly talented manpower. Every nation should be able to deliver high quality professionals to face threats or new innovations which help to enhance the living standards across the globe. For example, the Internet was an innovation which changed everyone's lifestyle drastically. To achieve all these, governments should concentrate on improving university studies. However, the vocational courses are equally important to every country. No one denies that, many immigrants to developed nations are working in stores, as hairdressers, decorators, car repairers. The solo reason for this phenomenon is those countries are not encouraging their citizens on skills training. The vocational courses help us to run a small business like running a car maintenance or hairdressing shops. Thus reduces the unemployment rates across the world. For example, in my part of the world, there are many people who completed part-time courses on electric repairs, housekeeping and settled in their life by running their own business. To sum up, it is very important for every nation to maintain highly qualified professionals as well as specialized skills individuals. A government should focus on both types of studies.
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country
contributes a significant amount of money to maintain world-
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class
education system.
However
, in recent decades, the number of
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nations
is enhancing university level
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courses
,
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but
they are ignoring the vocational
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courses
. To my mind, it is better to distribute the money
equally
on both types of courses.

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begin
with, every
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country
requires young talent in fields such as engineering, research, medicine. This
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helps
a
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country
to grow at a steep path and be competitive in the world market.
For example
,
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some
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countries
such
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as USA
, UK
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are
the acting as a global leader
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because
they
are equipped
with cutting edge technologies and
highly
talented manpower. Every
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nation
should be able to deliver high quality professionals to face threats or new innovations which
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help
to enhance the living standards across the globe.
For example
, the Internet was an innovation which
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changed
everyone's lifestyle
drastically
. To achieve all these,
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governments
should concentrate on improving university studies.

However
, the vocational
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courses
are
equally
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important
to every
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country
. No one denies that,
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many
immigrants to developed
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nations
are working in stores, as hairdressers, decorators, car repairers. The solo reason for this phenomenon is those
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countries
are not encouraging their citizens on
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skills
training. The vocational
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courses
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help
us to run a
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small
business like running a car maintenance or hairdressing shops.
Thus
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reduces
the unemployment rates across the world.
For example
, in my part of the world, there are
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many
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people
who completed part-time
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courses
on electric repairs, housekeeping and settled in their life by running their
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own
business.

To sum up, it is
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very
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important
for every
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nation
to maintain
highly
qualified professionals
as well
as specialized
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skills
individuals. A
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government
should focus on both types of studies.
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IELTS essay It is better for a country to spend money for skills training and vocational training with practical work ( e. g. car maintenance, hairdressing ) than university education.

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