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Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone? s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Many people wonder about advertisement (advertisements or advertising. This need to be a plural noun or a verb). Some people think that it has negative impact in our life. However, others said it has been playing (others say it has a) as positive effect in this world. This is not an easy essay to be answered, but I will look at this issue. (you should not include this sentence) Why advertisement has been playing a negative effect in our life? ( try not to ask question in essay) Of Course for several reasons: firstly, it motivates the psychological point in every body especially women. They will run to buy this advertised product especially if it’s from cosmetic roof (what do you mean? ), just to show their beauty to men, which will leads to more offender and raped (offenders and rape) cases. Secondly, you can sit comfortably with your family and suddenly the telephone is ringing, nothing important, rather than one of the companies try (trying) to convince you to buy one of their products. It is a real intrusive example of advertisement (example of intrusive advertisement). Lastly, sometimes you do not have the financial ability to buy something, but with these new methods of advertisement, you will(might) run to buy it, which will (could)affect your budget. On the other hand, there are some good things. Such as, it compares the prices of the most of companies which benefits the consumer. Beside, it really opens our vision to (gives us a chance to) see more products which we do not knowit (would not know about) unless TV and Radio show these things. In addition to (in addition), it cut down our daily routine to see new faces and know more language with daily update for their method of advertisement (advertising). In conclusion, as we can see there are many aspects to this essay (argument). I feel that there is no benefit at all from advertisement, it plays on minds of people (with people’s minds to make them) buy more thing that they do not need it at all.
Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone?
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s
life.
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Some
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people
say that advertising is a
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positive
part of our
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lives
while others say it is
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negative
. Discuss both views and give your
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own
opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your
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own
knowledge or experience.

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Many
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people
wonder about
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advertisement
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(advertisements
or advertising. This need to be a plural noun or a verb).
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Some
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people
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think
that it has
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negative
impact in our life.
However
, others said it has been playing (others say it has a) as
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positive
effect in this world. This is not an easy essay to
be answered
,
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but
I will look at this issue. (you should not include this sentence)

Why
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advertisement
has been playing a
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negative
effect in our life?
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(
try not to ask question in essay)
Of Course
for several reasons:
firstly
, it motivates the psychological point in every body
especially
women. They will run to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
this advertised product
especially
if it’s from cosmetic roof (what do you mean?
Loose punctuation mark.
)
,
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just
to
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show
their beauty to
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men
, which will leads to more offender and raped (offenders and rape) cases.
Secondly
, you can sit
comfortably
with your family and
suddenly
the telephone is ringing, nothing
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important
,
rather
than one of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
try (trying) to convince you to
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buy
one of their products. It is a real intrusive example of
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advertisement
(example of intrusive
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advertisement)
.
Lastly
,
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sometimes
you do not have the financial ability to
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buy
something,
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but
with these new methods of
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advertisement
, you will(might) run to
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buy
it, which will (could)affect your budget.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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some
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good
things. Such as, it compares the prices of the most of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
which benefits the consumer. Beside, it
really
opens our vision to (gives us a chance to)
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see
more products which we do not
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knowit
(would not know about) unless TV and Radio
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show
these things.
In addition
to (
in addition
), it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down our daily routine to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
new faces and know more language with daily update for their method of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
(advertising).

In conclusion
, as we can
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see
there are
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many
aspects to this essay (argument). I feel that there is no benefit at all from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
, it plays on minds of
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people
(with
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people’s
minds to
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make
them)
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
more thing that they do not need it at all.
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IELTS essay write a letter to your friend to invite your birthday party

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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