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Integrated speaking (question 3)announcement from the dean of Greenwich University for voting to the student of the year v.1

Integrated speaking (question 3)announcement from the dean of Greenwich University for voting to the student of the year v. 1
These days being a good member is most important in our society. It is the responsibility of parents should teach their children to be good. However, some people think that school is the place where it is taught. In this essay, I will discuss about the both sides of the argument and give my opinion. Firstly, parents should encourage their children to participate in social awareness programs. They should learn to overcome the failure and problems, that they face in their lifetime. Apart from that, due to a busy life, it is hard for parents to spend some time with their children. For instance, there is no time for parents to spend their time with their children because of their day jobs and work. So, there is no way that parents can teach their children how to be good in the community and discuss the valuable information, which is useful in their life. In contrast, school is the best way to learn many things and new information about the association. However, children learn how to be good, there are many cons of schooling. For example, school is the place where we meet some types of toxic people and it may result in bad behaviour of our children. Apart from studies, teachers should teach life lessons to their students from their own life experiences which helps to be good in society. In conclusion, by discussing the both sides of the argument in the above mentioned aforementioned points, it is the responsibility of both parents and academic to teach the children how to be good in society. In my humble opinion, parents should spend their time with children to teach them a great knowledge. The government should implement new social awareness programs in all the schools apart from education and sports, to develop good qualities in children.
These days being a
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good
member is most
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important
in our society. It is the responsibility of
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parents
should
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teach
their
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children
to be
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good
.
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,
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some
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people
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think
that
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school
is the place where it
is taught
. In this essay, I will
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discuss about the
both sides of the argument and give my opinion.

Firstly
,
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parents
should encourage their
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children
to participate in social awareness programs. They should learn to overcome the failure and problems, that they face in their lifetime. Apart from that, due to a busy life, it is
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hard
for
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parents
to spend
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some
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time
with their
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children
.
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, there is no
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time
for
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parents
to spend their
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time
with their
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children
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because
of their day jobs and work.
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So
, there is no way that
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parents
can
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teach
their
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children
how to be
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good
in the community and discuss the valuable information, which is useful in their life.

In contrast
,
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school
is the best way to learn
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many
things and new information about the association.
However
,
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children
learn how to be
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good
, there are
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many
cons of schooling.
For example
,
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school
is the place where we
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meet
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some
types of toxic
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people
and it may result in
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bad
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behaviour
of our
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children
. Apart from studies, teachers should
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teach
life lessons to their students from their
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own
life experiences which
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helps
to be
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good
in society.

In conclusion
, by discussing the both sides of the argument in the above mentioned aforementioned points, it is the responsibility of both
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parents
and academic to
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teach
the
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children
how to be
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good
in society. In my humble opinion,
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parents
should spend their
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time
with
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children
to
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teach
them
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "great knowledge".
a great knowledge
. The
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government
should implement new social awareness programs in all the
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schools
apart from education and sports, to develop
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good
qualities in
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children
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Integrated speaking (question 3)announcement from the dean of Greenwich University for voting to the student of the year v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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