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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that lifelong sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views.

Some people believe that death sentence is a better punishment for all the evil crimes and there are others, who believe that life imprisonment is the superior way of discouraging and punishing them. The essay below discuss both the views. On the one hand, criminals often deserve death deterrent due to the intensity of crimes they committed for. Certain crimes are intolerable and the criminals in those cases deserves capital punishment and this will further help in protecting the victim. For example, recently supreme court of India imposed death sentence on a person who raped a 5-year-old girl which is intolerable. Additionally, death penalty is considered a good deterrent in order to create fear in other people who thought of committing the same kind of crime. By observing the situations and the kind of punishments that are being imposed, people will change and reverse their decisions. For instance, in USA the person who attacked blacks was sentenced to death and from then we haven’t noticed any kind of similar attacks. On the other hand, lifelong imprisonment must be imposed in order to make the criminal repent. Years of jail makes a person to feel regret and there are higher chances they will not repeat these crimes again. For instance, recently through a special program with criminals in HBO, people have noticed how the criminals are feeling bad for the crimes they committed and also for the punishment that they are undergoing. Moreover, lifelong sentence gives another chance for the criminals in changing their life’s as well as the society. Through this kind of punishment there will be a long-term benefit for both the criminal and society. To conclude, judicial system in every country will impose the penalty based on the offence which the criminal is committed. However, the punishment may always end up in benefitting all the stake holders in the society.
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believe that death sentence is a better
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punishment
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crimes
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who
believe that life imprisonment is the superior way of discouraging and punishing them. The essay below discuss both the views.

On the one hand,
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criminals
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often
deserve death deterrent due to the intensity of
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crimes
they committed for. Certain
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crimes
are intolerable and the
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criminals
in those cases deserves capital
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punishment
and this will
further
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help
in protecting the victim.
For example
, recently supreme court of India imposed death sentence on a person
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who
raped a 5-year-
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old
girl which is intolerable.
Additionally
, death penalty
is considered
a
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good
deterrent in order to create fear in other
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people
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who
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thought
of committing the same
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kind
of
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crime
. By observing the situations and the
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kind
of
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punishments
that are
being imposed
,
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people
will
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change
and reverse their decisions.
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,
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in USA
the person
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who
attacked blacks
was sentenced
to death and from then we haven’t noticed any
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kind
of similar attacks.

On the other hand
, lifelong imprisonment
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must
be imposed
in order to
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make
the
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criminal
repent. Years of jail
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makes
a person to feel regret and there are higher chances they will not repeat these
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crimes
again.
For instance
, recently through a special program with
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criminals
in HBO,
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people
have noticed how the
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criminals
are feeling
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bad
for the
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crimes
they committed and
also
for the
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punishment
that they are undergoing.
Moreover
, lifelong sentence gives another chance for the
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criminals
in changing their
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life
’s
as well
as the society. Through this
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kind
of
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punishment
there will be a long-term benefit for both the
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criminal
and society.

To conclude
, judicial system in every country will impose the penalty based on the
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offence
which the
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criminal
is committed
.
However
, the
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punishment
may always
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end
up in
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benefitting
all the stake holders in the society.
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IELTS essay It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that lifelong sentence is a better deterrent.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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