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It cannot be denied that there is an increase in the number of aggressive scences in movies.

It cannot be denied that there is an increase in the number of aggressive scences in movies. gxq83
It cannot be denied that there is an increase in the number of aggressive scences in movies. This trend causes a number of problems including crime waves and juvenile crimes. However, there are a range of measures that could be implemented to address this issue including presenting legal implications for violent acts in movies and restricting access to children for theses movies. Perhaps the main problem of this violence in movies is that it results in more similar crimes in the actual world. To illustrate, gangs could abosrb methods used in movies to commit their crimes, whether for abduction or mugging, which would make the police work harder than ever before. Another major issue would be that it affects negatively the behaviour of children. This could be easily seen at schools, where pupils use aggressiveness to obtain what they want. Juvenile delinquency and truancy could be main issues as young children may try to imitate what they watch in movies by involving in crimes, such as drug trafficking and pickpocketing. However, the best way to tackle the issue of the poor impact of violent movies on societies could be to oblige producers of these movies to show the legal consequences of such behaviours. Although most criminals are arrested and sentenced to imprisonment for their misdeeds, movies may only show the bright side of their lives, and, as a result, others could be enticed to follow their foot steps. Moreover, children should not be allowed to have access to these movies. Legislations should be made to ensure that such violent content is restrcited to adults only and children cannot access it either at cinemas or for online streaming. In conclusion, violent movies contribute to the rise of crimes among adults and children. Only when movies show the results of violent behaviours and limit the access to young audience this situation will be remedied.
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be denied
that there is an increase in the number of aggressive
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scences
in
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movies
. This trend causes a number of problems including
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crime
waves and juvenile
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crimes
.
However
, there are a range of measures that could
be implemented
to address this
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issue
including presenting legal implications for
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violent
acts in
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movies
and restricting
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access
to
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children
for
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theses
movies.

Perhaps the main problem of this violence in
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movies
is that it results in more similar
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crimes
in the actual world. To illustrate, gangs could
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abosrb
methods
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used
in
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movies
to commit their
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crimes
, whether for abduction or mugging, which would
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make
the police work harder than ever
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before
. Another major
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issue
would be that it affects
negatively
the
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behaviour
of
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children
. This could be
easily
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seen
at schools, where pupils
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use
aggressiveness to obtain what they want. Juvenile delinquency and truancy could be main
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issues
as young
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children
may try to imitate what they
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watch
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movies
by involving in
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crimes
, such as drug trafficking and
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pickpocketing
.

However
, the best way to tackle the
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issue
of the poor impact of
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violent
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movies
on societies could be to oblige producers of these
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movies
to
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show
the legal consequences of such
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behaviours
. Although most criminals
are arrested
and sentenced to imprisonment for their misdeeds,
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movies
may
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only
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show
the bright side of their
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lives
, and,
as a result
, others could
be enticed
to follow their foot steps.
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,
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children
should not be
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allowed
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access
to these
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.
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Legislations
should
be made
to ensure that such
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violent
content is
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restrcited
to adults
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only
and
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children
cannot
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access
it either at cinemas or for online streaming.

In conclusion
,
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violent
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movies
contribute to the rise of
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crimes
among adults and
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children
.
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Only
when
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movies
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show
the results of
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violent
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behaviours
and limit the
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access
to young audience this situation will
be remedied
.
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IELTS essay It cannot be denied that there is an increase in the number of aggressive scences in movies.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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