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Is it good that people around the world wear similar clothing?

Is it good that people around the world wear similar clothing? 7Jmr6
Human beings are only the ones who moulds their lifestyle with the advent of the time. Some chages have been made to their life compared to the past for the people today. Clothing is one such thing that had changed drastically. Earlier they weared clothes that indicates their culture, While, now we can not differentiet them on their outfit as all of the put up similar outfit. I belive that it advantages outweigh the disadvantages for this advancement. To begain with, there are some disadvantages of this development. Various communities has differenent cultures. the clothes they wear can show about their culture. when the people from community goes to new place they are respected by seeing their clothes and treated well. Moreover, people can show their status in the society. By wearing the clothes according to their culture people can get to know about their culture. It shows about their tradition and the new generations will learn about their ancesters. However, i think there are only some disadvantages of it. Eventough, it had some disadvantages it has more positive impact to the society. When people wear the same clothes, then people can be seen equally. It increases the confidence in the people, if they are treated well. For instance, Uniforms are introduced in schools to the eq Cohesion and Coherence: Lexical Resource: Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Task Response:
Human beings are
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only
the ones who
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moulds
their lifestyle with the advent of the time.
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Some
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chages
have
been made
to their life compared to the past for the
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people
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today
. Clothing is one such thing that had
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changed
drastically
. Earlier they
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weared
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clothes
that indicates their
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culture
, While,
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now
we can not
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differentiet
them on their outfit as
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all of the
put up similar outfit.
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I belive
that it advantages outweigh the disadvantages for this advancement.

To
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begain
with, there are
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some
disadvantages of this development. Various communities has
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differenent
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cultures
.
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the
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clothes
they wear can
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show
about their
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culture
.
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when
the
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people
from community goes to new place they
are respected
by seeing their
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clothes
and treated well.
Moreover
,
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people
can
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show
their status in the society. By wearing the
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clothes
according to their
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culture
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people
can
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get
to know about their
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culture
. It
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shows
about their tradition and the new generations will learn about their
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ancesters
.
However
,
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i
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think
there are
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only
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some
disadvantages of it.

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Eventough
, it had
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some
disadvantages it has more
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positive
impact to the society. When
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people
wear the same
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clothes
, then
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people
can be
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seen
equally
. It increases the confidence in the
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people
, if they
are treated
well.
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, Uniforms
are introduced
in schools to the
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eq
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IELTS essay Is it good that people around the world wear similar clothing?

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
227 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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