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Is it good for children to start using computers for an early age and spend long hours on them ?advantages and disadvantages

Is it good for children to start using computers for an early age and spend long hours on them? advantages and disadvantages 57PD
As the role of technology has been very crucial in everyone's life, children have been accustomed to the computers. One may say using computers will give great knowledge to computers or the more negatives than positives. I believe using computers can have more negative effects than advantages because the computer makes children lazy and violent. If the children become addicted to computers, they will become lazy in their life and they will no longer concentrate on other important things they have to do. Day by day, as the computer steals their valuable time, they will not show an interest in studies and outdoor games. As a result, they will not only become lazy but also they will not be physically sound. For example, my father bought me a personal computer when I finished my 10th grade because I had got A+ in my 10th grade public exams. As I become more habituated to a computer, I became indolent to do my other activities such as studies, sports and the other extra routines. Consequently, my rank dropped to A- in my 12th standard. If anyone tried to take away my computer from me, I used to behave violently. Kids act unnaturally if they want to own these electronic machines. This creates abnormal behaviours in children. In future, they will not be social. On the other hand, their important role in their schools will get damaged if this continuous. Another major disadvantage using computers is, children may use adult sites (above 18 years old sites) instead of using a computer for beneficial reasons. For example, today almost in every website, there are ads which promote dating services, adult contents, etc. These ads and then the time spent on those websites by a kid are enough to spoil a good child. My conclusion is that the parents should either supervise their children while using computers, internet and encourage them to use it for benefits or do not allow their children to use computers. Otherwise, their children will have to face a lot of problems.
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effects than advantages
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lazy and violent.

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children
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become
addicted to computers, they will
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lazy in their
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life and
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important
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do. Day by day, as the computer steals their valuable time, they will not
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an interest in studies and outdoor games.
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me a personal computer when I finished my 10th grade
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because
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got
A+ in my 10th grade public exams. As I
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become
more habituated to a computer, I became indolent to do my
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other
activities such as studies, sports and the
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other
extra routines.
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, my rank dropped to A- in my 12th standard. If anyone tried to take away my computer from me, I
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to behave
violently
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own
these electronic machines. This creates abnormal
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adult sites (above 18 years
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today
almost in every website, there are ads which promote dating services, adult contents, etc. These ads and then the time spent on those websites by a kid are
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enough
to spoil a
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child.

My conclusion is that the parents should either supervise their
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children
while using computers, internet and encourage them to
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use
it for benefits or do not
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use
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IELTS essay Is it good for children to start using computers for an early age and spend long hours on them? advantages and disadvantages

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