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“Is it better to live in the city or the countryside? Why?”

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In the present, the need of people is increasing. They want to live in a better place where can help them improve the standards of living. Therefore, the city as well as the countryside strives every day to give people a happier and fulfilling life. The city is a collection of progressive, up – to – date development. The countryside is thought as a peaceful place still keeping backward ideas. So I think that it is better to live in the city because of the following reasons. The city brings many benefits. Firsly, the city provides people with modern education system. Schools are equipped with advanced educational methods. Teachers are trained professionally with the aim to bring students an abundance of knowledge. It also makes students accumulate foster critical thinking, values education, analytical skills and decision-making skills. In addition, students also experience outdoor activities, practical activities that help to connect them with the outside world. Students not only know theoretical knowledge but also practice based on the existing foundation. Secondly, the city also possesses kinds of entertainment such as cinema, theatre, shopping mall, game center and so on. Here, everyone will have fun because they can watch the latest films in the domestic country and the world. They can play interesting games to relieve the stress after a tired day. Also, they can choose a variety of products and buy anything they want or enjoy the cuisine in the restaurants. After living here, they will integrate into the bustling atmosphere of the city. Thirdly, the city has a good healthcare service. Nowadays, hospitals have been funded by government. They have been built with the best facilities to treat everyone. In addition, doctors and nurses are trained in an intensive environment. Thanks to that, the patient's health condition recovers quickly. In conclusion, it is preferable to live in a city where fulfills a need for their happiness and prepare for a prosperous future. It is important to think critically about living in the city. Because from the benefits that the city brings, people have more belief to choose to live here. They will live a happy life forever after. .
In the present, the need of
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people
is increasing. They want to
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live
in a better place where can
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help
them
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improve
the standards of living.
Therefore
, the city
as well
as the countryside strives every day to give
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people
a happier and fulfilling life. The city is a collection of progressive, up
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–
to
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–
date development. The countryside is
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thought
as a peaceful place
still
keeping backward
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ideas
.
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So
I
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think
that it is better to
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live
in the city
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because
of the following reasons.

The city brings
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many
benefits.
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Firsly
, the city provides
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people
with modern education system. Schools
are equipped
with advanced educational methods. Teachers
are trained
professionally
with the aim to bring
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students
an abundance of knowledge. It
also
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makes
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students
accumulate foster critical thinking, values education, analytical
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skills
and decision-making
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skills
.
In addition
,
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students
also
experience outdoor activities, practical activities that
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help
to connect them with the outside world.
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Students
not
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only
know theoretical knowledge
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but
also
practice based on the existing foundation.
Secondly
, the city
also
possesses kinds of entertainment such as cinema,
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theatre
, shopping mall, game center and
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so
on. Here, everyone will have fun
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because
they can
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watch
the latest films in the domestic country and the world. They can play interesting games to relieve the
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stress
after a tired day.
Also
, they can choose a variety of products and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
anything they want or enjoy the cuisine in the restaurants. After living here, they will integrate into the bustling atmosphere of the city.
Thirdly
, the city has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
healthcare service. Nowadays, hospitals have
been funded
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
. They have
been built
with the best facilities to treat everyone.
In addition
, doctors and nurses
are trained
in an intensive environment. Thanks to that, the patient's health condition recovers
quickly
.

In conclusion
, it is preferable to
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live
in a city where fulfills a need for their happiness and prepare for a prosperous future. It is
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important
to
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think
critically
about living in the city.
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Because
from the benefits that the city brings,
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people
have more belief to choose to
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live
here. They will
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live
a happy life forever after.
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IELTS essay “Is it better to live in the city or the countryside? Why? ”

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  American English
3 paragraphs
359 words
5.5
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