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Is it better to be unemployed in jobs rather than to be employed in jobs even if they don’t feel happy or enjoy it? Do you agree or disagree?

Is it better to be unemployed in jobs rather than to be employed in jobs even if they don’t feel happy or enjoy it? YdJPN
To find a satisfying and enjoyable work with a contentment paycheck is hard. The company hired someone because of skill and experience to make a company profit. As an employee, one thing that I learned after working for a couple years is that the company did not hire you to make you feel happy or enjoy your job. If you are not happy you can quit anytime, but before that ask yourself are you sure about your financial situation after being unemployed? In this modern economic system it has become a common thought that people have to work to earn money which is used for living. Financial and debt is a first reason to consider, weighting between monthly bills and unsatisfied job. If you still had to have a monthly income to live on, such as the cost of utilities, house rent and phone bill. A choice to quit the job might not be a good answer if you do not have any financial support. Seeking a new job might be an answer for some people. But it has no guarantee that everyone will be lucky to fit in one place at one time. Starting in a new company is another gamble for life. A new working environment, colleagues, clients and pressure might cause a loop of stress more over again. For some people who could not handle the disappointment of changing work many times could likely lose motivation or enthusiasm in their career path. However, It does not mean people's mental health is not important to consider with work. Mental health from work can occur and not many companies have a measure to provide it. Working in a dissatisfied job and bad feeling might affect work. Also, It might create a negative atmosphere in the working environment for other employees. To summarize, people try to succeed in their dream jobs but that does not mean everyone can. In this modern economic system, Happy or not enjoyable work or job is a common thing that can happen to anyone, but to be unemployed by feeling without financial support or career opportunity is to risk. So that is my reason why people devote their income and career path more than personal mental pleasure and find other ways to enjoy their life.
To find a satisfying and enjoyable
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work
with a contentment paycheck is
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hard
. The
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company
hired someone
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because
of
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skill
and experience to
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make
a
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company
profit. As an employee, one thing that I learned after
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working
for a
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couple
years is that the
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company
did not hire you to
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make
you feel happy or enjoy your
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job
. If you are not happy you can quit anytime,
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but
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before
that ask yourself are you sure about your
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financial
situation after
being unemployed
?

In this modern economic system it has become a common
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thought
that
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people
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have to
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work
to earn money which is
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used
for living.
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Financial
and debt is a
first
reason to consider, weighting between monthly bills and unsatisfied
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job
. If you
still
had to have a monthly income to
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live
on, such as the cost of utilities,
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house
rent and phone bill. A choice to quit the
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job
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might
not be a
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good
answer if you do not have any
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financial
support.

Seeking a new
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job
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might
be an answer for
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some
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people
.
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But
it has no guarantee that everyone will be lucky to fit in one place at one time. Starting in a new
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company
is another gamble for life. A new
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working
environment, colleagues, clients and pressure
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might
cause a loop of
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stress
more over again. For
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some
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people
who could not handle the disappointment of changing
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work
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many
times could likely lose motivation or enthusiasm in their career path.

However
, It does not mean
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people
's mental health is not
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important
to consider with
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work
. Mental health from
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work
can occur and not
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many
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companies
have a measure to provide it.
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Working
in a dissatisfied
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job
and
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bad
feeling
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affect
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work
.
Also
, It
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might
create a
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negative
atmosphere in the
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working
environment for other employees.

To summarize
,
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people
try to succeed in their dream
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jobs
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but
that does not mean everyone can. In this modern economic system, Happy or not enjoyable
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work
or
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job
is a common thing that can happen to anyone,
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but
to
be unemployed
by feeling without
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financial
support or career opportunity is to
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risk
.
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So
that is
my reason why
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people
devote their income and career path more than personal mental pleasure and find other ways to enjoy their life.
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IELTS essay Is it better to be unemployed in jobs rather than to be employed in jobs even if they don’t feel happy or enjoy it?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
380 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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