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Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people?

Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people? nE212
Nowadays, a lot of magazines feature stories about celebrities of what they eat, what they wear, and where they go. These kind of private information put the celebrities' privacy in danger. However, newspapers and magazines don't have the right to share this kind of this information, except if the celebrity is ok with it. In my opinion, I think that the governments should focus on this problem and find a way to stop it.
Nowadays,
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a lot of
magazines feature stories about celebrities of what they eat, what they wear, and where they go.
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These kind
of private information put the celebrities' privacy in
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danger
.
However
, newspapers and magazines don't have the right to share this kind of this information, except if the celebrity is ok with it. In my opinion, I
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think
that the
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governments
should focus on this problem and find a way to
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stop
it.
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IELTS essay Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people?

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