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Introducing yourself to teacher in the first class

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My name is Pichada Supanimitwisetkul. My nickname is Moji. I graduated from a Thai school named Khemasiri memorial school. I apply to MUIC for many reasons. First, I want to improve my English skills because I'm not good at writing, reading and grammar. Therefore, I decided to study at PC to develop my skills. Second, I want to have new friends from other countries. MUIC has many students from many countries. So, if I know some of them, it is a good experience in my life. And finally, It is easier to study abroad in the future. My current plan is to exchange or study abroad for a master's degree. That’s why I decided to apply at MUIC. In the future, when I finish my studies at PC. I will continue studying at MUIC in travel and service business entrepreneurship. Moreover, if I have a chance, I want to apply for work and travel program. And after that, when I graduated with a bachelor's degree. I might go to study for a master's degree abroad. In addition, I intend to run my own business to open a cafe.
My name is
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Pichada
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Supanimitwisetkul
. My nickname is
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Moji
. I graduated from a Thai school named
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Khemasiri
memorial school. I apply to
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MUIC
for
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many
reasons.
First
, I want to
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improve
my English
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skills
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because
I'm not
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good
at writing, reading and grammar.
Therefore
, I decided to
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study
at PC to develop my
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skills
. Second, I want to have new friends from other countries.
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MUIC
has
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many
students from
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many
countries.
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So
, if I know
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some
of them, it is a
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good
experience in my life. And
finally
, It is easier to
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study
abroad in the future. My
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current
plan is to exchange or
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study
abroad for a master's degree. That’s why I decided to apply at
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MUIC
.

In the future, when I finish my
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studies
at PC. I will continue studying at
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MUIC
in travel and service business entrepreneurship.
Moreover
, if I have a chance, I want to apply for work and travel program. And after that, when I graduated with a bachelor's degree. I might go to
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study
for a master's degree abroad.
In addition
, I intend to run my
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own
business to open a
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cafe
.
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IELTS essay Introducing yourself to teacher in the first class

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
188 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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