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Introduce yourself. Who are you?your education?your family?your hobby?

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My name is Ali. I am 18 years old. I am a Muslim. I am a Pakistani. I live in Chakwal city. I am a flower loving person. I did my matriculation from Allied school Chakwal campus and I got A+ grade. Now I recently completed my f. sc last year from Punjab college Chakwal campus and again I got A+ grade. Now I decided to go abroad for my further studies. Basically I am going abroad for getting law degree and I hope so I will become a good lawyer in future and will change the corrupt system of my country. Education is a great way to meet your dreams and fulfill them. My father name is hassan ali. He is a security guard by profession. My mother name is sara. She is a lawyer by profession. I have nine siblings. I love my family very much. My hobby is gardening because it is a source of joy and happiness for me. There are many plants and flowers in my garden. I also grow many fruits and vegetables in my garden.
My name is Ali. I am 18 years
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. I am a Muslim.
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I
am a Pakistani.
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I
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in
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Chakwal
city.
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I
am a flower loving person.
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did my matriculation from Allied school
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Chakwal
campus and I
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got
A+ grade.
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Now
I recently completed my f.
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sc
last year from Punjab college
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Chakwal
campus and again I
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got
A+ grade.
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Now
I decided to go abroad for my
further
studies.
Basically
I am going abroad for getting law degree and I hope
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so
I will become a
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good
lawyer in future and will
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change
the corrupt system of my country. Education is a great way to
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meet
your dreams and fulfill them. My father name is
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hassan
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ali
. He is a security guard by profession. My mother name is
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sara
. She is a lawyer by profession. I have nine siblings. I
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love
my family
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much. My hobby is gardening
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because
it is a source of joy and happiness for me. There are
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many
plants and flowers in my garden. I
also
grow
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fruits and vegetables in my garden.
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IELTS essay Introduce yourself. Who are you? your education? your family? your hobby?

Essay
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182 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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