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INTRODUCE YOURSELF ABOUT LEADERSHIP

INTRODUCE YOURSELF ABOUT LEADERSHIP BMxDX
I am a final-year Mechatronics Engineering student at King Mongkut's University of Technology Thonburi, and I am interested in applying for the CP ALL New Gen (Future Leader Program) with CP All Public Company Limited, as advertised on the company's Facebook page. have attached my curriculum vitae for your consideration. The company's vision and I can both support each other, so management trainee in the Future Leader Program appeals to me. I have a long history of leadership, including serving as student president in high school, gaining a leadership scholarship from the university, and participating in a variety of events over a six-year span with the purpose of improving new leaders, making improvements, and instilling a love of learning through the use of all of my power and strength. Furthermore, I am interested in every field of company, including people management, marketing, and so on, and want to accumulate experience by working in real-life situations. As student president, I was in charge of successfully coordinating all student activities and events. Every day, I had to put in a lot of effort, going from study mode to working mode, which helped me greatly develop myself and grow up to be courageous, efficient communicator, and mindful core. Since starting university, I've been involved in a tutorial club for about 8 camps, teaching children in rural schools and students who want to improve their learning skills. I've developed my people management, problem-solving, and organizational skills. Then, in my final year, I was awarded a leadership scholarship and was required to complete one project. My project is called "Communication of Students in KMUTT" (CoS I'm KMUTT), and I'm the project president. This initiative promotes participation in order to create new change agents capable of brainstorming, solving problems, and achieving results. I would be grateful for the chance to talk more about the program with you. Please accept my sincere gratitude for your time and consideration.
I am a final-year Mechatronics Engineering
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's University of Technology
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, and I
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in applying for the CP ALL New Gen (Future Leader Program) with CP All Public
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Limited, as advertised on the
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's Facebook page.
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attached my curriculum vitae for your consideration.

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company
's vision and I can both support each other,
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management trainee in the Future Leader Program appeals to me. I have a long history of leadership, including serving as
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student
president in high school, gaining a leadership scholarship from the university, and participating in a variety of
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events
over a six-year span with the purpose of improving new leaders, making improvements, and instilling a
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love
of learning through the
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use
of all of my power and strength.
Furthermore
, I
am interested
in every field of
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company
, including
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people
management, marketing, and
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so
on, and want to accumulate experience by working in real-life situations.

As
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president, I was in charge of
successfully
coordinating all
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student
activities and
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events
. Every day, I had to put in
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a lot of
effort, going from study mode to working mode, which
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helped
me
greatly
develop myself and grow up to be courageous, efficient communicator, and mindful core. Since starting university, I've
been involved
in a tutorial club for about 8 camps, teaching children in rural schools and
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students
who want to
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improve
their learning
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skills
. I've developed my
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people
management, problem-solving, and organizational
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skills
. Then, in my final year, I
was awarded
a leadership scholarship and
was required
to complete one project. My project
is called
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Communication of
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in
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KMUTT
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change
agents capable of brainstorming, solving problems, and achieving results.

I would be grateful for the chance to talk more about the program with you.
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Please
accept my sincere gratitude for your time and consideration.
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IELTS essay INTRODUCE YOURSELF ABOUT LEADERSHIP

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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