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BULLYING IS A BIG PROBLEM

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BULLYING IS A BIG PROBLEM THESE DAYS AND ONE SHOULD NOT GET AFRAID OF THIS ISSUE, INSTEAD ONE SHOULD FACE THE ISSUES. THERE CAN BE VARIOUS CAUSES OF GETTING BULLIED IRRESPECTIVE OF ONE RELIGION, GENDER, COLOUR, AGE, HEIGHT, WEIGHT ETC. STUDENTS LEARNT FROM THEIR HOMES, TELEVISIONS, AND OTHER SOCIAL MEDIA. THE BASIC LEARNING OF ANY STUDENT IS FROM THEIR HOME, IF A KID IS NOT RECEIVING GOOD FROM THEIR FAMILY THEY WILL NOT BE ABLE TO IMPART GOOD TO OTHERS. BULLYING HAS BECOME VERY COMMON IN SCHOOL AMONG STUDENTS, THEY BULLY THEIR CLASSMATES OR OTHER CHILDREN ON ANYTHING AND TRY TO MAKE THEM AFRAID. THERE ARE FEW SUGGESTIONS FOR THE SCHOOL TEACHERS TO TALK /INTERACT WITH THE ACCUSED AND GET TO KNOW THE REASON WHY HE/SHE GOT BULLIED WTH THE OTHER STUDENTS. STUDENTS MAKE THEIR GROUPS AND FOCUSES ON THE OTHER ONE AND BULLY THEM WHICH DECREASES THE MORALE OF THE STUDENT. FROM MY EXPERIENCE I HAVE SEEN MANY KIDS BULLYING OTHER KIDS ON THE BASIS OF CLASS. IF ONE FAMILY IS NOT FULLY EQUIPPED AND HE/SHE IS NOT ABLE TO MANAGE TO COME SCHOOL BY CAR/VEHICLE OTHER STUDENTS START BULLYING HIM/HER SAYING HE /SHE IS POOR. ON THE OTHER HAND SOME PEOPLE BULLY ON THE COLOUR OF THE SKIN WHICH MAKES THE OTHER STUDENT FEELS SO LOW AND THIS IS REALLY NOT GOOD. BULLYING SHOULD
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BULLYING
IS A
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BIG
PROBLEM THESE DAYS AND ONE SHOULD NOT
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GET
AFRAID OF THIS ISSUE,
INSTEAD
ONE SHOULD FACE THE ISSUES.

THERE CAN BE VARIOUS CAUSES OF GETTING BULLIED IRRESPECTIVE OF ONE RELIGION, GENDER,
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COLOUR
, AGE, HEIGHT, WEIGHT ETC.
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STUDENTS
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LEARNT
FROM THEIR HOMES, TELEVISIONS, AND
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OTHER
SOCIAL MEDIA. THE BASIC LEARNING OF ANY
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STUDENT
IS FROM THEIR HOME, IF A KID IS NOT RECEIVING
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GOOD
FROM THEIR FAMILY THEY WILL NOT BE ABLE TO IMPART
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GOOD
TO OTHERS.
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BULLYING
HAS BECOME
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VERY
COMMON IN SCHOOL AMONG
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STUDENTS
, THEY BULLY THEIR CLASSMATES OR
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OTHER
CHILDREN ON ANYTHING AND TRY TO
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MAKE
THEM AFRAID.

THERE ARE FEW SUGGESTIONS FOR THE SCHOOL TEACHERS TO TALK /INTERACT WITH THE ACCUSED AND
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GET
TO KNOW THE REASON WHY HE/SHE
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GOT
BULLIED WTH THE
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STUDENTS.

STUDENTS
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MAKE
THEIR GROUPS AND FOCUSES ON THE
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ONE AND BULLY THEM WHICH DECREASES THE MORALE OF THE STUDENT.

FROM MY EXPERIENCE I HAVE
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SEEN
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MANY
KIDS
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BULLYING
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OTHER
KIDS ON THE BASIS OF
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CLASS
. IF ONE FAMILY IS NOT
FULLY
EQUIPPED AND HE/SHE IS NOT ABLE TO MANAGE TO
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COME
SCHOOL BY CAR/VEHICLE
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STUDENTS
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BULLYING
HIM/HER SAYING HE /SHE IS POOR. ON THE
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HAND
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SOME
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PEOPLE
BULLY ON THE
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COLOUR
OF THE SKIN WHICH
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MAKES
THE
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STUDENT
FEELS
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SO
LOW AND THIS IS
REALLY
NOT
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GOOD
.
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SHOULD
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IELTS essay BULLYING IS A BIG PROBLEM

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
225 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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