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International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. l75WQ
It is generally acknowledged that travelling abroad is becoming more affordable than ever before, many countries have new approaches to attract more tourists and welcome more international visitors. From my point of view, although there are still drawbacks of international travel, the benefits of abroad tourism are more significant. It is undeniable that main income of multiple countries is from tourism. It attracts investment from multi-national companies and creates employment in services like accommodation, transport and entertainment. Earnings which are from international explorers lead to oppunities in tourism. More occupations will be created to accommodate the needs of tourists. Local people can have more job opportunities in hotels or restaurant. Therefore, they can earn money to improve the standard of living. Addionally, Travelling abroad opens our mind and broadens our horizon. Tourists can experience different languages and cultures. Local people can learn different langauges and cultures from these international tourists, and this will enhance their educantional opportunities. Moreover, tourism advertising is also one of the most important factors that help the tourism industry to generate foriegn people. if visitors enjoy their tips, they will advertise the destination to other people or they will come back in the future. On the other hand, there are some detrimental sides of welcoming foreign tourists. Tourism have negative effects on the natural environment. The building of facilities and infrastructure can destryoy the habitat of wild animals. Tourists create pollution and waste. For example, many beaches are spoilt by a significant amount of garabage from visitors. Furthermore, A rise in the cost of living affects local people. The price of good, services and housing increase dramatically due to the growth in the number of visitors. In conclusion, It is obvious that positive sides outweigh the negative sides. International travel plays a crucial role in the economic development, cultural education and tourism advertising around the world. From my perspective, governments should introduce more laws to protect natural environment as well as local businesses should be supported.
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generally
acknowledged that travelling abroad is becoming more affordable than ever
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before
,
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many
countries have new approaches to attract more
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tourists
and welcome more
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international
visitors. From my point of view, although there are
still
drawbacks of
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international
travel, the benefits of abroad
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tourism
are more significant.

It is undeniable that main income of multiple countries is from
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tourism
. It attracts investment from multi-national
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companies
and creates employment in services like accommodation, transport and entertainment. Earnings which are from
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international
explorers lead to
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oppunities
in
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tourism
. More occupations will
be created
to accommodate the needs of
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tourists
.
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Local
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people
can have more job opportunities in hotels or restaurant.
Therefore
, they can earn money to
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improve
the standard of living.

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Addionally
, Travelling abroad opens our mind and broadens our horizon.
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Tourists
can experience
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different
languages and cultures.
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Local
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people
can learn
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different
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langauges
and cultures from these
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international
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tourists
, and this will enhance their
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educantional
opportunities.
Moreover
,
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tourism
advertising is
also
one of the most
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important
factors that
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help
the
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tourism
industry to generate
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foriegn
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people
.
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if
visitors enjoy their tips, they will advertise the destination to other
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people or
they will
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come
back in the future.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
detrimental sides of welcoming foreign
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tourists
.
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Tourism
have
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negative
effects on the natural environment. The building of facilities and infrastructure can
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destryoy
the habitat of wild animals.
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Tourists
create pollution and waste.
For example
,
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many
beaches are
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spoilt
by a significant amount of
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garabage
from visitors.
Furthermore
, A rise in the cost of living affects
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local
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people
. The price of
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good
, services and housing increase
dramatically
due to the growth in the number of visitors.

In conclusion
, It is obvious that
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positive
sides outweigh the
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negative
sides.
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International
travel plays a crucial role in the economic development, cultural education and
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tourism
advertising around the world. From my perspective,
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governments
should introduce more laws to protect natural environment
as well
as
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local
businesses should
be supported
.
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IELTS essay International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
330 words
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