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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while other s do not. What are your opinion on this? v.1

International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while other s do not. What are your opinion on this? v. 1
In modern society traveling abroad become more popular. Some people believe that it has advantages, however, others do not. This essay agrees that it is a negative trend because it will lead to a lack of domestic tourism and economic disadvantages. Local tourism could have a negative impact because of the shortage of tourists. Some people claim that international journeys attract more visitors and if this phenomenon will be promoted more, domestic journeys can be disappeared. Potential tourists would like to discover different unusual places for themselves, that's why they have the motivation to go to overseas destinations. A recent study found that It is widely believed that international trips do not positively influence the economy of the tourists' country of residence. It is true that for visiting abroad we should have some fundings to cover our stay in a new temporary region. Moreover, a lot of place for visiting is very expensive. This finance will be moved out of the state treasury. Research shows that tourists spend at least 1, 500 US dollars for a one week period of their trip abroad. On the other hand, moving to other countries can give a chance us to learn more about new cultures. Furthermore, a traveler can have access to various resources that he or she does not have in his native countries, such as oceans and mountains. Another good choice for oversea tourism is that we can find new friends. In conclusion, global tourism can be a reason for at least 2 disadvantages, such as negative effects on domestic tourism and in a bad financial situation in the living country of tourists. We should also take into consideration that discovering oversea places can teach us about different cultures, we can meet new friends and enjoy nature that we don't have.
In modern society traveling abroad become more popular.
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Some
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people
believe that it has advantages,
however
, others do not. This essay
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agrees
that it is a
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negative
trend
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because
it will lead to a lack of domestic
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tourism
and economic disadvantages.

Local
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tourism
could have a
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negative
impact
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because
of the shortage of
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tourists
.
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Some
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people
claim that international journeys attract more visitors and if this phenomenon will
be promoted
more, domestic journeys can
be disappeared
. Potential
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tourists
would like to discover
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different
unusual places for themselves, that's why they have the motivation to
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go to overseas
destinations. A recent study found
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that


It is
widely
believed that international trips do not
positively
influence the economy of the tourists'
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country
of residence. It is true that for visiting abroad we should have
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some
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fundings
to cover our stay in a
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new
temporary region.
Moreover
,
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a lot of
place for visiting is
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very
expensive. This finance will be
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moved
out of the state treasury. Research
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shows
that
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tourists
spend at least 1, 500 US dollars for a
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one week
period of their trip abroad.

On the other hand
, moving to other
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countries
can give a chance us to learn more about
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new
cultures.
Furthermore
, a traveler can have access to various resources that he or she does not have in his native
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countries
, such as oceans and mountains. Another
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good
choice for oversea
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tourism
is that we can find
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new
friends.

In conclusion
, global
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tourism
can be a reason for at least 2 disadvantages, such as
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negative
effects on domestic
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tourism
and in a
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bad
financial situation in the living
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country
of
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tourists
. We should
also
take into consideration that discovering oversea places can teach us about
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different
cultures, we can
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meet
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new
friends and enjoy nature that we don't have.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while other s do not. What are your opinion on this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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