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intelligent students should be taught separately from other students To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

intelligent students should be taught separately from other students v. 1
Some people believed that gifted students should not learn with ordinary students. I agree that talents need customized study plans to develop their potential fully, but I do not think they should stay away from the majority. Intelligent students need special care to develop their talents fully. They are usually fast learners with deep thought and demonstrate outstanding levels of aptitude or competence in one or more domains, which means standard teaching model would not suit them. Instead, personalized curriculums, including supplementary enriching high-level material and project-oriented teaching styles, should be employed. Besides, talent development programs after school can also be a plus point. Jeff Bezos, for example, the founder of Amazon, have been invited in a science program at the University of California, which improved his computer skill and helped to prepare him for his future career. While an individualized teaching plan is necessary, separating talents from other students might cost their social skills. Due to different mindsets and concerns, most intelligent students suffered from lacking proper social skills for interacting with people. Taking them away from ordinary people would only deteriorate the situation. There is a study on the students who graduated from a famous talent school in China named the University of Science and Technology of China. It suggests that from the perspective of personal achievement and influence, students who graduated from here tend to end up being specialists rather than CEOs or managers. They have not shown superior accomplishments than other students with the same IQ but graduated from traditional education. In conclusion, the development of students' talents should not come at the cost of students' social skills. A personalized learning plan in traditional school would be better than studying separately from the majority.
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believed that gifted
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students
should not learn with ordinary
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students
. I
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agree
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talents
need customized study plans to develop their potential
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,
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they should stay away from the majority.

Intelligent
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students
need special care to develop their
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talents
fully
. They are
usually
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fast
learners with deep
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thought
and demonstrate outstanding levels of aptitude or competence in one or more domains, which means standard teaching model would not suit them.
Instead
, personalized curriculums, including supplementary enriching high-level material and project-oriented teaching styles, should
be employed
.
Besides
,
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talent
development programs after school can
also
be a plus point. Jeff Bezos,
for example
, the founder of Amazon, have
been invited
in a science program at the University of California, which
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improved
his computer
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skill
and
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helped
to prepare him for his future career.

While an individualized teaching plan is necessary, separating
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talents
from other
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students
might cost their social
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skills
. Due to
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different
mindsets and concerns, most intelligent
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students
suffered from lacking proper social
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skills
for interacting with
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people
. Taking them away from ordinary
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people
would
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only
deteriorate the situation. There is a study on the
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students
who graduated from a
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famous
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talent
school in China named the University of Science and Technology of China. It suggests that from the perspective of personal achievement and influence,
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students
who graduated from here tend to
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end
up being specialists
rather
than CEOs or managers. They have not shown superior accomplishments than other
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students
with the same IQ
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but
graduated from traditional education.

In conclusion
, the development of
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talents
should not
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at the cost of
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skills
. A personalized learning plan in traditional school would be better than studying
separately
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay intelligent students should be taught separately from other students v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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