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Integrated essay.Communal online encyclopedia.(OFFICIAL TOEFL iBT TESTS)test-3

Integrated essay. Communal online encyclopedia. (OFFICIAL TOEFL iBT TESTS)test-3 qVD65

The passage and the lecture are about the online communal encyclopedias which is one of the latest resources found on the internet and how they differ from the traditional encyclopedias. The lecture denies the passage which is mostly objecting the online encyclopedias and presents traditional communal encyclopedias to be better. 1st the lecturer states the point about the errors in traditional encyclopedias which remain unchanged for decades. As well she sites a general point that it is hardly any communal encyclopedia is found without errors on or offline. So it's not a point to say that online communal encyclopedias are more prejudiced secondly, the lecture says about hacking, which is not easy for online communal encyclopedias as it is usually created by special editors in a form that no one can change. In the first place the correctness of communal encyclopedia is questioned. Hence it is a crucial factor to determine which is more reliable on or offline. 3rd doubt the lecturer casts is about the space. Traditional communal encyclopedias are limited in place so it contents only what can attract people. They include only what is important. That's not same with online encyclopedias. It emphasizes about the strong advantages of online encyclopedia to include more information as it has unlimited space.

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traditional
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secondly
, the lecture says about hacking, which is not easy for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 communal encyclopedias as it is usually
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change
. In the first
 place the correctness of communal encyclopedia is questioned
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Hence,
Hence
 it is a crucial factor to determine which is more reliable on or offline.

3rd doubt the lecturer casts is about the space. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withconventionaloldclassicalclassicuniversaltime-honored
Traditional
 communal encyclopedias are limited
 in place This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 it contents This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 what can attract This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. They include This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 what is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
. That's not same with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 encyclopedias. It emphasizes about the strong advantages of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
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