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Instant Noodle Manufacture

Instant Noodle Manufacture aJORG
The flowchart demonstrates the various stages of producing instant noodles. Overall, there are eight key steps in this production, starting with getting the flour in storage silos and ending with sending instant noodles to stores or supermarkets. First of all, flour which is stored in silos is delivered from the flour factory to the noodle manufacturing. After the flour is transported and placed in storage silos, water and oil are added to create a flour mixer. Then, using rollers, this mixture is transformed into dough sheets and then it will cut into thin strips. After that, the noodles are formed into discs and fried in hot oil before being dried to remove any excess oil. Following that, these round-shaped noodles are packaged into an appropriate number of cups, and vegetables and spices are added. These cups are then labeled and sealed. These items are sent to stores or supermarkets immediately as soon as the manufacturing is completed.
The flowchart demonstrates the various stages of producing instant noodles.

Overall
, there are eight key steps in this production, starting with getting the
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flour
in storage silos and ending with sending instant
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noodles
to stores or supermarkets.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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flour
which
is stored
in silos
is delivered
from the
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flour
factory to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noodle
manufacturing. After the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flour
is transported
and placed in storage silos, water and oil are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
to create a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flour
mixer. Then, using rollers, this mixture
is transformed
into dough sheets and then it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
into thin strips. After that, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noodles
are formed
into discs and fried in hot oil
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
being dried
to remove any excess oil.

Following that, these round-shaped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noodles
are packaged
into an appropriate number of cups, and vegetables and spices are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
. These cups are then labeled and sealed. These items are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to stores or supermarkets immediately as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as the manufacturing
is completed
.

IELTS essay Instant Noodle Manufacture

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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