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Nowadays, people travel a lot more than in the past. Some people think that tourists should follow the cultural and religious traditions of the country they are visiting. Others argue that it is not required for the tourist to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people travel a lot more than in the past. Some people think that tourists should follow the cultural and religious traditions of the country they are visiting. Others argue that it is not required for the tourist to do so. m9BGd
In present time travelling has been increased dramatically over the past few decades. According to some people visitors should follow the traditions and culture of that country where they will go; however, others think totally opposite side. I think that people opt that in which they are more comfortable, they need to try religious things in other nations. This essay will discuss both the point of view in upcoming paragraphs. TO commence with, visiting other countries is craze for the people as they can find out more adventurous and exciting things. First, people need to act in accordance with the people of who is living in the same country, which may lead to a new experience and they can see that how people live their life in different continents. For instance, people from Rajasthan have their own folk dance which is famous worldwide and people who visits that place will try to wearing traditional Rajasthani dress and feel that mesmerizing moment. Moreover, an individual can share this experience with another person, which helps to boost up the economy of country too. The more visitors, the more revenue, such as Uttarakhand, Kashmir and so on. On the contrary side, not only follow the rituals, but there are many other things also included while roaming the other nations. At first, public can explore the language of the other part of world, for example Spain has their own language Spanish that can help to learn something new apart from their routine. Furthermore, they can also observe that how people live their life in other part, while in early time numerous crowd had different lifestyle, though now people have advanced technology and how apply it on their daily life. This kind of things helps to gain a knowledge living lifestyle. To conclude, I firmly believe that people have to try different things while travelling to other place, it helps to increase the knowledge of rituals, cultures, way to living life and many more.
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over the past few decades. According to
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some
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visitors should follow the traditions and culture of that
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country
where they will go;
however
, others
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think
totally
opposite side. I
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think
that
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people
opt that in which they are more comfortable, they need to try religious things in
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other
nations. This essay will discuss both the point of view in upcoming paragraphs.

TO commence with, visiting
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other
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countries
is craze for the
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people
as they can find out more adventurous and exciting things.
First
,
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people
need to act in accordance with the
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people
of who is living in the same
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country
, which may lead to a new
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experience and
they can
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see
that how
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people
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their
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life
in
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different
continents.
For instance
,
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people
from Rajasthan have their
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own
folk dance which is
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famous
worldwide and
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people
who
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visits
that place will try to
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wearing
traditional
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Rajasthani
dress and feel that mesmerizing moment.
Moreover
, an individual can share this experience with another person, which
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helps
to boost up the economy of
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country
too. The more visitors, the more revenue, such as Uttarakhand, Kashmir and
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so
on.

On the contrary
side, not
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only
follow the rituals,
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but
there are
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many
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other
things
also
included while roaming the
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other
nations. At
first
, public can explore the language of the
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other
part of world,
for example
Spain has their
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own
language Spanish that can
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help
to learn something new apart from their routine.
Furthermore
, they can
also
observe that how
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people
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live
their
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life
in
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other
part, while in early time numerous crowd had
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different
lifestyle, though
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now
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people
have advanced technology and how apply it on their daily
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life
. This kind of things
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helps
to gain a knowledge living lifestyle.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that
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people
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have to
try
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different
things while travelling to
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other
place, it
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helps
to increase the knowledge of rituals, cultures, way to living
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life
and
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many
more.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people travel a lot more than in the past. Some people think that tourists should follow the cultural and religious traditions of the country they are visiting. Others argue that it is not required for the tourist to do so.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.0
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