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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. NA02
Our everyday lives are progressively changing and taken over by Information Technology also known as IT. Although there are a lot of harming effects such as children getting influenced to do dangerous stuff based on what they saw on the internet, all the informations that we can now easily access which was hard to do before is a big advantages for humans. In my opinion, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages. The greatest benefit of having Information technology is informations and knowledge are now very much available and easy to find by a simple search on google which used to be unavailable. People can now thousands of helpful tutorials and guides on the internet which can help them get through their everyday life a lot easier. People now often are less likely to search for a teacher because they can find the problems they need to fix all ready with a simple search. For example, they are having difficulties with their math homework, people used to try finding a tutor to help them finish the assignment but now, they would simply open their gadgets and find the answer. The main negative aspect is people with an underdeveloped brain such as the ones in the age below 15 tend to follow what they see for they are still learning their ways through life. There are a lot of video creators and infulencers that post contents that are not suitable for a child to watch. Therefore, the effect is that they will follow what those people are doing thinking that it is okay for them to do it which can lead to different types of rebellion such as smoking, doing drugs and other things which can be bad mentally and physically. Information Technology is becoming increasingly common. While knowledge can be easily accessable, this can be very harmful for the brains of people who are below the age. ultimately, there are still more advantages than the disadvantages.
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progressively
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Technology
also
known as IT. Although there are
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a lot of
harming effects such as children getting influenced to do
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dangerous
stuff based on what they
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saw
on the internet, all the
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informations
that we can
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now
easily
access which was
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hard
to do
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before
is a
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big
advantages for humans. In my opinion, the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages.

The greatest benefit of having
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technology is
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informations
and knowledge are
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now
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much available and easy to find by a simple search on google which
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used
to be unavailable.
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People
can
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now
thousands of helpful tutorials and guides on the internet which can
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help
them
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get
through their everyday life a lot easier.
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People
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now
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often
are less likely to search for a teacher
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because
they can find the problems they need to
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fix
all ready with a simple search.
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, they are having difficulties with their math homework,
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people
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used
to try finding a tutor to
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help
them finish the assignment
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now
, they would
simply
open their gadgets and find the answer.

The main
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negative
aspect is
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people
with an underdeveloped brain such as the ones in the age below 15 tend to follow what they
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see
for they are
still
learning their ways through life. There are
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a lot of
video creators and
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infulencers
that post contents that are not suitable for a child to
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watch
.
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, the effect is that they will follow what those
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people
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that it is okay for them to do it which can lead to
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different
types of rebellion such as smoking, doing drugs and other things which can be
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bad
mentally and
physically
.

Information Technology is becoming
increasingly
common. While knowledge can be
easily
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accessable
, this can be
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very
harmful for the brains of
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people
who are below the age.
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ultimately
, there are
still
more advantages than the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities.

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4 paragraphs
325 words
5.5
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