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Information technology is changing in many aspects

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Introduction: In our daily lives, Information technology takes an important place and it dominates our home, leisure, and work activities. Passage 1: Human population is rapidly increasing day by day and also the no of users using the internet and a set of smart devices running with electronics and others are also increasing. In today's generation, smart devices are ruling the world. Without smart work, a wholesome of work related to online transactions, mobile recharges, delivery of products quickly to our homes, and even online shopping through the internet at the comfort of our homes makes easy through this. People have been very much getting comforted with the use of smart devices and smart work. For instance, computers are in that much use for 10 years but nowadays the use of the internet and computer is common in almost every home. Because it simplifies our work and makes it effortless at any time. In our homes, almost every work that has been done by man for many years is now being done by a machine. Especially, people are so dependent on mobile phones and the internet they are using every day and now they dominate our home, leisure and work activities which we do every day. So information technology is changing many aspects and it is making to rely on it for our day-to-day work and also our leisure time. Passage 2: As there are so many benefits of using information technology, there are some disadvantages to using it. For instance, we use the internet from the Routers and use computers, mobile phones in our daily life. By using these, we get a lot of radiation from these devices and this is not good for one's health and also from the cell towers that are around our homes. As this is also a problem for people and they have to look into this and make a decision to not avoid damage coming out of this. Conclusion: We all know how much we rely on smart things and devices use. As there are advantages, there are some issues we have to face in the future by going on like this. There should be a solution to this that overcome the issues.
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, Information technology takes an
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important
place and it dominates our home, leisure, and
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work
activities.

Passage 1: Human population is
rapidly
increasing day by day and
also
the
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no
of users using the internet and a set of
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smart
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devices
running with electronics
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and others
are
also
increasing. In
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today
's generation,
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smart
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devices
are ruling the world. Without
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smart
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work
,
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a wholesome of
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work
related to online transactions, mobile recharges, delivery of products
quickly
to our
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homes
, and even online shopping through the internet at the comfort of our
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homes
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makes
easy through this.
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People
have been
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very
much getting comforted with the
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use
of
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smart
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devices
and
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smart
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work
.
For instance
, computers are in that much
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use
for 10 years
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but
nowadays the
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use
of the internet and computer is common in almost every home.
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Because
it simplifies our
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work
and
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makes
it effortless at any time. In our
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homes
, almost every
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work
that has
been done
by
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man
for
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many
years is
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now
being done
by a machine.
Especially
,
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people
are
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so
dependent on mobile phones and the internet they are using every day and
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now
they dominate our home, leisure and
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work
activities which we do every day.
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So
information technology is changing
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many
aspects and it is making to rely on it for our day-to-day
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work
and
also
our leisure time.

Passage 2: As there are
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benefits of using information technology, there are
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disadvantages to using it.
For instance
, we
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use
the internet from the Routers and
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use
computers, mobile phones in our daily life. By using these, we
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get
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a lot of
radiation from these
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devices
and this is not
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good
for one's health and
also
from the cell towers that are around our
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homes
. As this is
also
a problem for
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people and
they
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have to
look into this and
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make
a decision to not avoid damage coming out of this.

Conclusion: We all know how much we rely on
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smart
things and
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devices
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use
. As there are advantages, there are
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some
issues we
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have to
face in the future by going on like this. There should be a solution to this that overcome the issues.
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IELTS essay Information technology is changing in many aspects

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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