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Influence of human beings on the world 's ecosystem is leaving to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

Influence of human beings on the world 's ecosystem is leaving to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
The ecosystem is pivotal for survival for numerous living bodies. Extinction of various species and lacking of biodiversity has taken place because of humankind's influence. This essay will discuss that, population and industrialisation are some aspects of the present era that cause the disappearance of flora and fauna, while awareness and ecological development can help to decrease it. With the pace of time population has been increasing every. By this, requirements are also rising such as food, commodity etc. Which increases a huge pressure on the living things and their habitats. Moreover, manufacturing of plenty of sources for the people needed, a lot of land are to be required for the industries, which cause deforestation of forests and agriculture land. Due to this, many species get die. For example, a recent survey about the world's ecological cycle experienced by mankind all over earth showed that, two major causes of extinction of living habits were high scale in population and industries. Hence, it is important that we need to address these issues at the earliest. Despite all this, there are various methods to combat with problem of extinction and strike a balance. These methods include promoting awareness across people and ecological growth. For instance, authorities should spread the importance of these species among the people because in this way person aware about necessity of natural species and protect them. In addition, Ecofriend development should be preferred most. In other words, lands are occupied which are far from any natural living bodies by me firms, so that it may not cause pollution also. Therefore, we should keep these things to solve the problem of extinction. In conclusion, ecological process is indispensable for species which is facing disturbance by the people influence, it leads the danger to numerous species and lose of biodiversity. However, increasing awareness among people and ecofriend establishment can help to overcome the world's ecosystem problems.
The ecosystem is pivotal for survival for numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
bodies. Extinction of various species and lacking of biodiversity has taken place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of humankind's influence. This essay will discuss that, population and
Possible spelling mistake. 'industrialisation' is British English.
industrialisation
are
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some
aspects of the present era that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
the disappearance of flora and fauna, while awareness and ecological development can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to decrease it.

With the pace of time population has been increasing every. By this, requirements are
also
rising such as food, commodity etc. Which increases a huge pressure on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
things and their habitats.
Moreover
, manufacturing of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of sources for the
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people
needed,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
land are to
be required
for the industries, which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
deforestation of forests and agriculture land. Due to this,
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many
species
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
.
For example
, a recent survey about the world's ecological cycle experienced by mankind all over earth
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that, two major
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causes
of extinction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
habits were high scale in population and industries.
Hence
, it is
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important
that we need to address these issues at the earliest.

Despite all this, there are various methods to combat with problem of extinction and strike a balance. These methods include promoting awareness across
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and ecological growth.
For instance
, authorities should spread the importance of these species among the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
in this way person aware about necessity of natural species and protect them.
In addition
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ecofriend
development should
be preferred
most.
In other words
, lands
are occupied
which are far from any natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
bodies by me firms,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it may not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
pollution
also
.
Therefore
, we should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
these things to solve the problem of extinction.

In conclusion
, ecological process is indispensable for species which is facing disturbance by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
influence, it leads the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
to numerous species and lose of biodiversity.
However
, increasing awareness among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and
Possible spelling mistake found.
ecofriend
establishment can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to overcome the world's ecosystem problems.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Influence of human beings on the world 's ecosystem is leaving to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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