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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.37

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 37
Many people believe that only governments and large corporations could do something to improve the environment. The first reaction to some people is to concur to such claims. Nevertheless, there are several reasons to refute this statement. In the following paragraphs, there are a number of perspectives to discuss this issue more in-depth. Firstly, the main reason to support my position is that individuals could help to improve the environment by separating trash. Take my friend, Tina, for example, she not only separates her own household trash, but also teaching neighbours about how doing it. By that way, the trash of their suburb much less than last year. From such examples, it demonstrates that every one of us could make an effort for our living area. Also, another reason for my belief is that even the government provides good policies, civilians should follow the rules then it can make a difference. Therefore, it is important to let civilians know why we need to protect our natural surroundings. For instance, my sister, Annie, went a series of lessons according to environment protection. After the lessons, she becomes a natural teacher to teach people how to conserve our surroundings. Now there are more than thousands of students who heard her lectures and decided to be volunteers of natural conservation. Consequently, it can be said that educating civilians could also help our nature. To conclude, it is not to say that other points of view are totally without merits. Nonetheless, the ideas I have presented could support the position of not only the government or companies could make a difference in the world.
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people
believe that
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only
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governments
and large corporations could do something to
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improve
the environment. The
first
reaction to
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people
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is
to concur to such claims.
Nevertheless
, there are several reasons to refute this statement. In the following paragraphs, there are a number of perspectives to discuss this issue more in-depth.

Firstly
, the main reason to support my position is that individuals could
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help
to
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improve
the environment by separating trash. Take my friend, Tina,
for example
, she not
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only
separates her
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own
household trash,
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but
also
teaching
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neighbours
about how doing it. By that way, the trash of their suburb much less than last year. From such examples, it demonstrates that every one of us could
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make
an effort for our living area.

Also
, another reason for my belief is that even the
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government
provides
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good
policies, civilians should follow the
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rules
then it can
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make
a difference.
Therefore
, it is
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important
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
civilians know why we need to protect our natural surroundings.
For instance
, my sister, Annie, went a series of lessons according to environment protection. After the lessons, she becomes a natural teacher to teach
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
how to conserve our surroundings.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
there are more than thousands of students who heard her lectures and decided to be volunteers of natural conservation.
Consequently
, it can
be said
that educating civilians could
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
our nature.

To conclude
, it is not to say that other points of view are
totally
without merits. Nonetheless, the
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ideas
I have presented could support the position of not
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only
the
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government
or
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companies
could
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make
a difference in the world.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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