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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 2
It is believed by some individuals that big establishments and the government are the only ones who can influence the society to be better and not the citizens. In my opinion, I totally disagree with this idea because there is a lot the people can do. They live and work there and are the best to either make or mar their environment. Firstly, a community comprises of individuals living or working together. Hence, the responsibility of caring for the place lies on them. Furthermore, adopting simple attribute such as avoiding the dumping of refuse inappropriately or preventing the emission of air pollutants from car engines and domestic fumes will contribute to the overall maintenance of the surrounding. For example, Malaysia became one of the neatest countries worldwide because it was mandatory for every home to have a garbage and recycle bin. This was also made availabl at every street corner. Thus, the earlier the indigienes stand up to their responsibilities the better for them. Secondly, little drops of water makes an ocean. In essence, if everyone imbibes an attitude of cleanliness constantly, it will culminate into having an enviable society. For instance, it is a rule in my neighbourhood that every household must be involved in the weekly sanitation of the community and this simple practice has paid off for us such that in the last 5 years, there has been no need for the authorities to repair or replace anything on our street. In conclusion, waiting for the government or big companies to come an make a difference in the environment is synonymous to laziness on the part of the people. The onus lies on them to make an indelible mark in their various metropolis
It
is believed
by
some
individuals that
big
establishments and the
government
are the
only
ones who can influence the society to be better and not the citizens. In my opinion, I
totally
disagree with this
idea
because
there is a lot the
people
can do. They
live
and work there and are the best to either
make
or mar their environment.

Firstly
, a community
comprises of
individuals living or working together.
Hence
, the responsibility of caring for the place lies on them.
Furthermore
, adopting simple attribute such as avoiding the dumping of refuse
inappropriately
or preventing the emission of air pollutants from car engines and domestic fumes will contribute to the
overall
maintenance of the surrounding.
For example
, Malaysia became one of the neatest countries worldwide
because
it was mandatory for every home to have a garbage and recycle bin. This was
also
made
availabl
at every street corner.
Thus
,
the earlier the
indigienes
stand up to their responsibilities the better for them.

Secondly
,
little
drops of water
makes
an ocean. In essence, if everyone imbibes an attitude of cleanliness
constantly
, it will culminate into having an enviable society.
For instance
, it is a
rule
in my
neighbourhood
that every household
must
be involved
in the weekly sanitation of the community and this simple practice has paid off for us such that in the last 5 years, there has been no need for the authorities to repair or replace anything on our street.

In conclusion
, waiting for the
government
or
big
companies
to
come
an
make
a difference in the environment is synonymous to laziness on the part of the
people
. The onus lies on them to
make
an indelible mark in their various
metropolis
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
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