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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.16

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 16
A common belief amidst indigenous people of a society is that environmental issues are part of government and multinational organization's job to solve whereas, the general audience are helpless to make any difference to this sombre matter. In my point of view, i beg to differ from this opinion due to the sole factor such as voluntary work can be done by anyone for the welfare of the society. Furthermore, this essay will outline the reasons with pragmatic examples of how a person can solve environmental issues single handedly. Firstly, human beings living in an area are responsible to keep the society pollution free because it is a self-awareness job to maintain cleanliness around the place we reside in. For Instance, let’s take Mr. Rajdeep Chowdhury as an role model, who took the initiative of cleaning Juhu beach and started alone this not paid work to keep the neighborhood dirt free, now has generated a team of 20 people to wipe out the entire beach waste free. In Mumbai Juhu beach is quite popular among the locals for spending evening out however, since earning its recognition the place has become crowded with street food which often creates a plethora of waste materials for instance plastics on the shore. Therefore, this benevolent act proves that there are ample opportunities lying for individuals to enhance environment. On the other hand, there are companies responsible for producing waste and polluting the nature balance, although to back up this issue they are promoting tree plantation as their corporate social responsive activity. For example, organization like BAT is always on limelight for producing smoking products that is extremely malignant to the environment. Dissimilarly, tree plantation is an act of saving the mother nature from this vicious situation which is creating a balance against this harmful act and being optimized by the organizations. So, the organizations are playing their part to be in the business game. To sum up, maintaining the atmosphere of the society is not only a job for the rulers of the estates or gigantic organizations doing their business but also, it is a task for the people who live in it and breathe. Because a healthy community will prolong the living cycles of the individuals in it.
A common belief amidst indigenous
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people
of a
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society
is that environmental issues are part of
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government
and multinational organization's job to solve whereas, the general audience are helpless to
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make
any difference to this
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sombre
matter. In my point of view,
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i
beg to differ from this opinion due to the sole factor such as voluntary work can
be done
by anyone for the welfare of the
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society
.
Furthermore
, this essay will outline the reasons with pragmatic examples of how a person can solve environmental issues single
handedly
.

Firstly
, human beings living in an area are responsible to
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keep
the
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society
pollution free
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because
it is a self-awareness job to maintain cleanliness around the place we reside in.
For Instance
,
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let
’s take Mr.
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Rajdeep
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Chowdhury
as
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an
role model, who took the initiative of cleaning
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Juhu
beach and
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started
alone this not paid work to
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keep
the neighborhood dirt free,
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now
has generated a team of 20
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people
to wipe out the entire beach waste free. In Mumbai
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Juhu
beach is quite popular among the locals for spending evening out
however
, since earning its recognition the place has become crowded with street food which
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often
creates a plethora of waste materials
for instance
plastics on the shore.
Therefore
, this benevolent act proves that there are ample opportunities lying for individuals to enhance environment.

On the other hand
, there are
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companies
responsible for producing waste and polluting the nature balance, although to back up this issue they are promoting tree plantation as their corporate social responsive activity.
For example
,
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organization
like BAT is always on limelight for producing smoking products
that is
extremely
malignant to the environment.
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Dissimilarly
, tree plantation is an act of saving the mother nature from this vicious situation which is creating a balance against this harmful act and
being optimized
by the
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organizations
.
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So
, the
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organizations
are playing their part to be in the business game.

To sum up, maintaining the atmosphere of the
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society
is not
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only
a job for the rulers of the estates or gigantic
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organizations
doing their business
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but
also
, it is a task for the
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people
who
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live
in it and breathe.
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Because
a healthy community will prolong the living cycles of the individuals in it.
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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