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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.14

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 14
Environmental issues have recently become one of the most concerned topics all over the world. Many people assert that individuals cannot do anything to help save the environment. They also claim that only administrations and prosperous firms can make a difference. Personally, I disagree with this opinion. I believe that saving our natural habitat is every human being’s obligation. Along with governments and large companies, we can make huge differences. Firstly, I contend that every individual holds the biggest power to improve the environment. The most important reason is that all human beings has equal duty to the Mother Nature. It is because we are all living on Earth and exploiting its resources to benefit ourselves. So, it is our obligation to give back to the Earth. Another reason is that contaminants come from everyone, and therefore, if everyone makes efforts to cut down pollution, the change we make can be incredible. For example, if each person reduces one plastic straw everyday for a week, we can reduce 53 billion plastic straws. As a result, citizens’ efforts can have massive impacts on the environment. Secondly, I strongly believe that all administrations and companies should use their means and resources to assist the people in saving our home. One of the reasons is that people need guidance from their governmnents to achieve a mutual goal. To illustrate, administrations can make environmental laws such as banning single-used plastic. In additions, thriving enterprises can sponser science projects that can help to alliviate environmental problems or activities that can raise people’s awareness. In conclusion, although a portion of people assume that individuals cannot any difference in saving the Mother Nature, I assert that citizens is the most powerful force for improving our natural habitat. Along with governments and companies, we can make unbelievable changes.
Environmental issues have recently become one of the most concerned topics all over the world.
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people
assert that individuals cannot do anything to
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help
save the environment. They
also
claim that
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only
administrations and prosperous firms can
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make
a difference.
Personally
, I disagree with this opinion. I believe that saving our natural habitat is every human being’s obligation. Along with
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governments
and large
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companies
, we can
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make
huge differences.

Firstly
, I contend that every individual holds the biggest power to
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improve
the environment. The most
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important
reason is that all human beings has equal duty to the Mother Nature. It is
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because
we are all living on Earth and exploiting its resources to benefit ourselves.
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So
, it is our obligation to give back to the Earth. Another reason is that contaminants
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come
from everyone, and
therefore
, if everyone
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makes
efforts to
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cut
down pollution, the
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change
we
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make
can be incredible.
For example
, if each person
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reduces
one plastic straw
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everyday
for a week, we can
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reduce
53 billion plastic straws.
As a result
, citizens’ efforts can have massive impacts on the environment.

Secondly
, I
strongly
believe that all administrations and
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companies
should
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use
their means and resources to assist the
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people
in saving our home. One of the reasons is that
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people
need guidance from their
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governmnents
to achieve a mutual goal. To illustrate, administrations can
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make
environmental laws such as banning single-
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used
plastic. In additions, thriving enterprises can
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sponser
science projects that can
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help
to
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alliviate
environmental problems or activities that can raise
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people’s
awareness.

In conclusion
, although a portion of
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people
assume that individuals cannot any difference in saving the Mother Nature, I assert that citizens is the most powerful force for improving our natural habitat. Along with
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governments
and
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companies
, we can
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make
unbelievable
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changes
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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