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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.13

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 13
The theme announced in the topic is concentrated on ecological problems. This author thinks that working individually we could not ever make the environment better and improvement in nature only could be reached with the involvement of such forces as governments and corporations. There is a real problem existing nowadays when with industrialization there came harmful emissions, air pollutions and extinction of the whole species. Does it really work like that? There I will try to make clear my opinion on this topic Of course, the environmental problem is very acute nowadays. Fast steps of technical progress make people feel themselves more comfortable with basic things, but the progress also leaves an indelible mark on the world. And there will be no improvements until the large corporations would not think about the environmental problems. I actually agree with this part of the authors topic. For example, my aunt Natalia who lives in Chelyabinsk says that all the time people there suffer from the emissions by Chelyabinsk Zinc processing factory. There is a thick smog half a summer and all winters their snowdrifts are covered with iced black crust. Even if snow became black what implications we could see in our lungs, in our environment? Nothing good, until corporations stops saving money on non-cleaning the emissions and begin installing special filter systems from the most part of harmful products. On the other hand, I cannot agree at all with the author at all. It is too pessimistic to think that individuals can do nothing with an environmental problem. Who if not individuals could bring to corporations and governments the idea of the benefits of reducing the harm to the nature? I have such a great example which shows that individuals could make much more than we expecting from them. Firstly, I would like to mention two sisters from Bali – Isabel and Melati Wijsen. They were just schoolgirls when they were inspired by the Mahatma Gandi to do any significant things and they realized that their island, beaches and water suffers from plastic pollution. They involved school in their project, talked with lots of Bali tourists in the airport and finally they have been noticed by local government, which fortunately supported them and now they banned all the plastic bags on Bali and who knows may me in a couple of years their project will grow into a recycling factory or something more. All in all, I can say that our bad position should not grow into pessimistic thoughts shifting all responsibility to huge companies and governments. Individuals and corporations should work together and share ideas to come to a better future for our nature.
The theme announced in the topic
is concentrated
on ecological
problems
. This author
thinks
that working
individually
we could not ever
make
the environment better and improvement in nature
only
could
be reached
with the involvement of such forces as
governments
and
corporations
. There is a real
problem
existing nowadays when with industrialization there came harmful emissions, air pollutions and extinction of the whole species. Does it
really
work like that? There I will try to
make
clear
my opinion on this topic

Of course
, the environmental
problem
is
very
acute nowadays.
Fast
steps of technical progress
make
people
feel themselves more comfortable with basic things,
but
the progress
also
leaves
an indelible mark on the world. And there will be no improvements until the large
corporations
would not
think
about the environmental
problems
. I actually
agree
with this part of the
authors
topic.
For example
, my aunt Natalia who
lives
in Chelyabinsk says that all the time
people
there suffer from the emissions by Chelyabinsk Zinc processing factory. There is a thick smog half a summer and all winters their snowdrifts
are covered
with iced black crust. Even if snow became black what implications we could
see
in our lungs, in our environment? Nothing
good
, until
corporations
stops
saving money on non-cleaning the emissions and
begin
installing special filter systems from the most part of harmful products.

On the other hand
, I cannot
agree
at all with the author at all. It is too pessimistic to
think
that
individuals
can do nothing with an environmental
problem
.
Who if
not
individuals
could bring to
corporations
and
governments
the
idea
of the benefits of reducing the harm to the nature? I have such a great example which
shows
that
individuals
could
make
much more than
we expecting
from them.
Firstly
, I would like to mention two sisters from Bali
Isabel and
Melati
Wijsen
. They were
just
schoolgirls when they
were inspired
by the Mahatma
Gandi
to do any significant
things and
they realized that their island, beaches and water suffers from plastic pollution. They involved school in their project, talked with lots of Bali tourists in the airport and
finally
they have
been noticed
by local
government
, which
fortunately
supported them and
now
they banned all the plastic bags on Bali and who knows may me in a couple of years their project will grow into a recycling factory or something more.

All in all, I can say that our
bad
position should not grow into pessimistic thoughts shifting all responsibility to huge
companies
and
governments
.
Individuals
and
corporations
should work together and share
ideas
to
come
to a better future for our nature.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 13

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
444 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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