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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environ- ment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or dis- agree? v.2

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environ- ment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 2
It is argued that no one can mitigate environmental issues, apart from the governments and big corporations. Personally, I completely disagree with this statement because we should join hands to protect our environment. On the one hand, there is many reasons why individuals can make a substantial contribution to environmental mitigation. From the perspective of the gas emission, by reducing the amount of carbon footprint, the residents use public transportations such as bus, train instead of the personal vehicle. In this way, we not only cut down on expenses but also limit the effect on ozone layer depletion. In addition to the reduction of greenhouse gases, our living responsibility is daily publishing. When we classify litters and throw them in the right place, the pollution on our living is controlle; this will impact positively on people’s health and climate change. For example, if we divide into three kinds of litters, including organic, inorganic, and recycled rubbish, it helps factories in garbage disposal without difficulty. On the other hand, in terms of the role of authorities and organizations for nature. Firstly, the government should take strict measures to many businesses that are irresponsible for chemical waste released into rivers, oceans. This action will prevent the resource of polluted water from the daily life of residents nearby and save the annual budget for cleaning rivers. Secondly, big companies producing productions which are packaged by plastic should use eco-friendly materials such as paper, glass, giving rise to awareness of consumer in protecting the earth. For instance, many clothing stores contain productions in paper bags in place of plastic bags for customers. In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I still hold my initial view that the responsibility of the environment is not a personal one
It
is argued
that no one can mitigate environmental issues, apart from the
governments
and
big
corporations.
Personally
, I completely disagree with this statement
because
we should
join
hands to protect our environment.

On the one hand, there is
many
reasons why individuals can
make
a substantial contribution to environmental mitigation. From the perspective of the gas emission, by reducing the amount of carbon footprint, the residents
use
public transportations such as bus, train
instead
of the personal vehicle. In this way, we not
only
cut
down on expenses
but
also
limit the effect on ozone layer depletion.
In addition
to the reduction of greenhouse gases, our living responsibility is daily publishing. When we classify litters and throw them in the right place, the pollution on our living is
controlle
; this will impact
positively
on
people
’s health and climate
change
.
For example
, if we divide into three kinds of litters, including organic, inorganic, and recycled rubbish, it
helps
factories in garbage disposal without difficulty.

On the other hand
, in terms of the role of authorities and organizations for nature.
Firstly
, the
government
should take strict measures to
many
businesses that are irresponsible for chemical waste released into rivers, oceans. This action will
prevent
the resource of polluted water from the daily life of residents nearby and save the annual budget for cleaning rivers.
Secondly
,
big
companies
producing productions which
are packaged
by plastic should
use
eco-friendly materials such as paper, glass, giving rise to awareness of consumer in protecting the earth.
For instance
,
many
clothing stores contain productions in paper bags in place of plastic bags for customers.

In conclusion
, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I
still
hold my initial view that the responsibility of the environment is not a personal one
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Individuals can do nothing to improve the environ- ment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. v. 2

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