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Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 2: Agree or disagree? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v.2

Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 2: Agree or disagree? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 2
There is no doubt that in today’s immensely sophisticated world people are putting in a lot of effort into having good relationship with their friends, family members, coworkers, and especially their spouses. Honesty plays a decisive role in each of these relationships. This brings up a controversial question in every individual' s mind: Are we always supposed to tell the truth in our relationships? In this regard, some people are inclined toward the fact that telling the truth is the best and most important strategy in every relationship while others hold exactly the opposite perspective and believe that relationships can be based on other aspects and telling the truth is not that much important. From my viewpoint, everybody deserves to know the truth. Furthermore, telling the truth will be profitable for us as well since it will establish a sense of mutual trust and calmness. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my perspectives for supporting telling the truth all the time. One of the reasons that immediately comes to mind is that telling the truth all the time will bring about a change in people' s trust in each other. That' s to say, honesty will be followed by mutual trust. Imagine a relationship between a stockbroker and its customer. If the stockbroker doesn' t transmit the real information about the shares, the customer won' t rely on him anymore. So the broker will lose his customers gradually and it will damage his profit. That' s why paying attention to truth is very important. The next major point to be mentioned is that telling the truth engenders calmness and peace of mind. The person who lies a lot digresses from important issues because he should remind the lies that have told to everybody. Telling a lie would be followed by another lie and the second lie followed by the third one and so forth. For example, last week, my friend lied to her husband that she and her friend had gone on a trip. Then, she had to lie about the place where they went and she has to remember it to avoid telling the truth later. Therefore, she will be worried. As a result, the person who never lies feels better and is calm. To wrap it up, if one weighs the merits and demerits of telling lie and truth, one soon realizes that it is worth telling the truth always. In fact, mutual trust and peace of mind engendered by truth help everybody to be successful in their relationships with their family, friends, and coworkers. I hope that one day we can purge the world of lies so that everyone would tell the truth in its entirety.
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today
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immensely
sophisticated world
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people
are putting in
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a lot of
effort into having
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good
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relationship
with their
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friends
, family members, coworkers, and
especially
their spouses. Honesty plays a decisive role in each of these
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relationships
. This brings up a controversial question in every
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individual&
#039; s
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mind
: Are we always supposed to
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tell
the
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truth
in our
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relationships
? In this regard,
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some
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people
are inclined
toward the fact that
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telling
the
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truth
is the best and most
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important
strategy in every
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relationship
while others hold exactly the opposite perspective and believe that
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relationships
can
be based
on other aspects and
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telling
the
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truth
is not that much
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important
. From my viewpoint, everybody deserves to know the
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truth
.
Furthermore
,
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telling
the
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truth
will be profitable for us
as well
since it will establish a sense of mutual
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trust
and calmness. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my perspectives for supporting
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telling
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truth
all the time.

One of the reasons that immediately
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comes
to
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mind
is that
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telling
the
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truth
all the time will bring about a
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change
in
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people&
#039; s
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trust
in each other.
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That&
#039; s to say, honesty will
be followed
by mutual
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trust
. Imagine a
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relationship
between a stockbroker and its customer. If the stockbroker
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doesn&
#039; t transmit the real information about the shares, the customer
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won&
#039; t rely on him anymore.
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So
the broker will lose his customers
gradually
and it will damage his profit.
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That&
#039; s why paying attention to
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truth
is
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very
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important
.

The
next
major point to
be mentioned
is that
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telling
the
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truth
engenders calmness and peace of
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mind
. The person who
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lies
a lot digresses from
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important
issues
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because
he should remind the
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lies
that have
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told
The verb 'to tell someone' does not require a preposition.
to everybody
.
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Telling
a
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lie
would
be followed
by another
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lie
and the second
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lie
followed by the third one and
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so
forth.
For example
, last week, my
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friend
lied to her husband that she and her
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friend
had gone on a trip. Then, she had to
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lie
about the place where they
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
went and
she
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has to
remember it to avoid
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telling
the
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truth
later.
Therefore
, she will
be worried
.
As a result
, the person who never
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lies
feels better and is calm.

To wrap it up, if one weighs the merits and demerits of
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telling
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lie
and
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truth
, one
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soon
realizes that it is worth
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telling
the
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truth
The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
always
. In fact, mutual
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trust
and peace of
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mind
engendered by
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truth
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help
everybody to be successful in their
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relationships
with their family,
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friends
, and coworkers. I hope that one day we can purge the world of
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lies
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that everyone would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
truth
in its entirety.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 2: Agree or disagree? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
451 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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