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Increasing the price of petrol reduce decreased traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree to this statement.

Increasing the price of petrol reduce decreased traffic and pollution problems. V013O
Inarguably, fossil fuels place a a vital role in this modern world. Therefore, it is often believed by many that increasing the amount and tax of petrol is the best solution to tackle the issues caused due to pollution and traffic congestion. I completely agree with this view point and the following lines justify the same. On one hand, increased traffic congestion leads to wastage of valuable time. This is because individuals waste their precious time on traffic, thus are late to work. For example, recent studies shows that one fourth of humans life time is wasted by being in traffic. Another concerning factor is that the hustling and bustling of the urbanized cities further leads to traffic problems. This implies decreased vehicles could reduce the problems which are faced by today's society. Consequently, the increased pay of crude oils can thus limit the problems which are caused due to individuals On the other hand, pollution problems can be managed by reducing the number of vehicles on road. The reason for this is increased traffic leads to highest pollution of both air and noise, thus it leads to health problems such as bone diseases which threatens life as a whole. Apart from that, noise pollution also affects the health of cardiac patients which may worse of the condition of those. For instance, it is often witnessed that 30% of population are affected due to air pollution. Furthermore, increasing the price of petrol not only minimise traffic confestion but also promotes the total health of the individuals. To conclude, increasing the tax of fossil fuels leads to decreased traffic condition and pollution which further affects the health of the individuals. In my opinion, looking at the benefits of increasing the price of petrol government should regulate those rules so as to to reduce traffic congestion.
Inarguably
, fossil fuels place
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a a
vital role in this modern world.
Therefore
, it is
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often
believed by
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many
that
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increasing
the amount and tax of petrol is the best solution to tackle the issues caused due to
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pollution
and
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traffic
congestion. I completely
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agree
with this view point and the following lines justify the same.

On one hand, increased
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traffic
congestion leads to wastage of valuable time. This is
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because
individuals waste their precious time on
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traffic
,
thus
are late to work.
For example
, recent studies
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shows
that one fourth of humans
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life time
is wasted
by being in
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traffic
. Another concerning factor is that the hustling and bustling of the urbanized cities
further
leads to
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traffic
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problems
. This implies decreased vehicles could
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reduce
the
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problems
which
are faced
by
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today
's society.
Consequently
, the increased pay of crude oils can
thus
limit the
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problems
which
are caused
due to individuals

On the other hand
,
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pollution
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problems
can
be managed
by reducing the number of vehicles on road. The reason for this
is increased
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traffic
leads to
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highest
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pollution
of both air and noise,
thus
it leads to
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health
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problems
such as bone diseases which threatens life as a whole. Apart from that, noise
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pollution
also
affects the
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health
of cardiac patients which may worse of the condition of those.
For instance
, it is
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often
witnessed that 30% of population are
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affected
due to air
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pollution
.
Furthermore
,
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increasing
the price of petrol not
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only
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minimise
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traffic
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confestion
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but
also
promotes the total
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health
of the individuals.

To conclude
,
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increasing
the tax of fossil fuels leads to decreased
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traffic
condition and
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pollution
which
further
affects the
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health
of the individuals. In my opinion, looking at the benefits of
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increasing
the price of petrol
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government
should regulate those
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rules
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so as to
to
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reduce
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traffic
congestion.
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol reduce decreased traffic and pollution problems.

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