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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing ttaffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing ttaffic and pollution problems. v. 1
The rising levels of traffic and pollution can be controlled by enhancing the petroleum cost. I completely agree with this statement, because high price directly affects the product demand and this will also have a knock-on effect on other products, thus can lower gasoline consumption due to shortage of money. Firstly, the increase in petrol price will follow the law of demand. This is to say, according to law the higher the price of a product the lower will be its demand and vice versa. Hence the surge in prices will ensure that, people buy less fuel for their vehicles. This will make sure that lesser lorries on roads, which will solve high traffic issues. For example, in the Pakistan due to high petroleum prices, the country has witnessed a decline in road traffic. The other outcome of high gasoline price is that, the rates of other commodities will jump up. This can happen as petrol is used in trucks, for the supply of products to the market. If people have to pay extra amount for basic necessities, they will be left with little amount to run their homes. As a result, they would not use their conveyance for travel, which will reduce pollution on the roads. For instance, according to the UK finance department data, the petroleum rates and inflation are directly proportional to each other. To conclude, the high volume of traffic and pollution can be managed by hiking the gas asking price. I totally agree with this stance, because it can decrease petrol demand and consumer purchasing ability, therefore can reduce traffic and pollution.
The rising levels of
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traffic
and
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pollution
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by enhancing the petroleum cost. I completely
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agree
with this statement,
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because
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high
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price
directly
affects the
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product
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demand
and this will
also
have a knock-on effect on other
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products
,
thus
can lower gasoline consumption due to shortage of money.

Firstly
, the increase in petrol
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price
will follow the law of
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demand
. This is to say, according to law the higher the
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price
of a
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product
the lower will be its
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demand
and vice versa.
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Hence
the surge in
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prices
will ensure that,
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people
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buy
less fuel for their vehicles. This will
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make
sure that lesser lorries on roads, which will solve
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high
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traffic
issues.
For example
, in the Pakistan due to
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high
petroleum
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prices
, the country has witnessed a decline in road traffic.

The other outcome of
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high
gasoline
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price
is that, the rates of other commodities will jump up. This can happen as petrol is
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used
in trucks, for the supply of
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products
to the market. If
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people
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have to
pay extra amount for
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basic necessities
, they will be
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left
with
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little
amount to run their homes.
As a result
, they would not
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use
their conveyance for travel, which will
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reduce
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pollution
on the roads.
For instance
, according to the UK finance department data, the petroleum rates and inflation are
directly
proportional to each other.

To conclude
, the
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high
volume of
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traffic
and
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pollution
can
be managed
by hiking the gas asking
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price
. I
totally
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agree
with this stance,
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because
it can decrease petrol
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demand
and consumer purchasing ability,
therefore
can
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reduce
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traffic
and
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pollution
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing ttaffic and pollution problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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