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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.4

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 4
Nowadays people think that the ultimate method of solving the problem of traffic jam and pollution is to raise the cost of petrol. From my point of view, I totally disagree with this opinion as I believe that there are other measures which might be much more effective than increasing petrol price. There are reasons why I do not approve of the given opinion. First and foremost, pushing up the price of petrol will make no changes to people’s habit of commuting to work by private cars. Given the inconvenience of the public transport system, no matter how expensive petrol is, people still have to rely on cars without having any possible alternations. What is more, increasing petrol price will lead to high cost of transportation, which may affect local economy as the price of goods rises. Therefore, it is counterproductive to raise fuel prices in order to tackle the problems of traffic congestion and pollution. Measures could be taken to solve the problem of traffic jam include limiting the number of private cars in the city centre and encourage more people to use public transports such as buses or the metro. In order to make public transport passenger-friendly, the network should be expanded and the frequency should also be increased. Moreover, local authorities have to subsidize buses and trains in order to attract more people. In terms of solving pollution problem, nowadays thanks to the development of the energy industry, there are various types of renewable power sources in which cars can use such as solar power, wind energy or electricity – all of them are environmentally friendly. As long as they are put into practice, certainly no worries have to be made on the disposal of exhaust fumes from cars. In conclusion, I believe that increasing petrol price is not efficient since people still have to rely on their cars, given the inconvenience of the public transport. Instead, only by providing people with the amenities in public transportation facilities and applying renewable sources of energy to cars could traffic congestion and pollution be solved.
Nowadays
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people
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think
that the ultimate method of solving the
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problem
of
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traffic
jam and pollution is to raise the cost of
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petrol
. From my point of view, I
totally
disagree with this opinion as I believe that there are other measures which might be much more effective than increasing
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petrol
price.

There are reasons why I do not approve of the
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given
opinion.
First
and foremost, pushing up the
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price
of
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petrol
will
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make
no
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changes
to
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people’s
habit of commuting to work by private
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cars
.
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Given
the inconvenience of the
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public
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transport
system, no matter how expensive
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petrol
is,
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people
still
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have to
rely on
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cars
without having any possible alternations.
What is more
, increasing
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petrol
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price
will lead to high cost of transportation, which may affect local economy as the
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price
of
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goods
rises.
Therefore
, it is counterproductive to raise fuel
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prices
in order to tackle the
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problems
of
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traffic
congestion and pollution.

Measures could
be taken
to solve the
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problem
of
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traffic
jam include limiting the number of private
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cars
in the city
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centre
and encourage more
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people
to
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use
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public
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transports
such as buses or the metro. In order to
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make
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public
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transport
passenger-friendly, the network should
be expanded
and the frequency should
also
be increased
.
Moreover
, local authorities
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have to
subsidize buses and trains in order to attract more
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people
. In terms of solving pollution
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problem
, nowadays thanks to the development of the energy industry, there are various types of renewable power sources in which
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cars
can
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use
such as solar power, wind energy or electricity
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–
all of them are
environmentally
friendly. As long as they
are put
into practice,
certainly
no worries
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have to
be made
on the disposal of exhaust fumes from cars.

In conclusion
, I believe that increasing
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petrol
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price
is not efficient since
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people
still
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have to
rely on their
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cars
,
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given
the inconvenience of the
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public
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transport
.
Instead
,
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only
by providing
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people
with the amenities in
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public
transportation facilities and applying renewable sources of energy to
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cars
could
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traffic
congestion and pollution
be solved
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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