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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.32

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 32
Many people believe that increasing the gasoline rates would be the best possible mean to reduce the traffic issues and growing pollution. Although a rise in petroleum cost may have some impact on traffic and pollution problems, it is definitely not the best option because it would result in inflation in the country. So I have to completely disagree with this. The better way to solve these problems would be to improve public transport and increase taxation on private cars. To begin with, raising the fuel prices would lead to a significant inflation in the country. Clearly, a rise in the cost of fuel would lead to a higher expenditure on the transports of goods, which would see people buying the daily household items like grocery and vegetables at a much higher rates. Similarly, it would affect the energy production expenditure from fossil fuels, resulting in expensive electricity being provided to the industry, which would in turn also rise the production cost, further contributing to a price hike. I, therefore, believe that increasing petrol prices would not be a wise idea to mitigate traffic and pollution concerns. The best way to meet these issues would be to introduce taxation on private cars' travelling and parking, and also improve the public transport. In other words, if a better alternatives to car travelling could be made available to the public in terms of cheap, safe, comfortable and convenient buses, trams and trains, and also by increasing the routes to carry maximum passengers from all parts of the city, people would love to shift from private cars to these facilities. Moreover, further taxation on private car utility as well as an increase in parking fee would also discourage people to use personal vehicles. All these steps would help solve the environmental and transport issues of a country. To conclude, I firmly believe that increasing fuel rates is not the solution of transportation and emission challenges, rather legislation to increase taxes on the use of personal vehicle and availability of better alternatives would help controlling these issues.
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believe that
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the gasoline rates would be the best possible mean to
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reduce
the traffic
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issues
and growing pollution. Although a rise in petroleum cost may have
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some
impact on traffic and pollution problems, it is definitely not the best option
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because
it would result in inflation in the country.
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So
I
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have to
completely disagree with this. The better way to solve these problems would be to
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improve
public
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transport
and increase taxation on
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private
cars.

To
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begin
with, raising the
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fuel
prices would lead to a significant inflation in the country.
Clearly
, a rise in the cost of
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fuel
would lead to a higher expenditure on the
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transports
of
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goods
, which would
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see
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people
buying the daily household items like grocery and vegetables at a much higher rates.
Similarly
, it would affect the energy production expenditure from fossil
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fuels
, resulting in expensive electricity
being provided
to the industry, which would in turn
also
rise the production cost,
further
contributing to a price hike. I,
therefore
, believe that
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increasing
petrol prices would not be a wise
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idea
to mitigate traffic and pollution concerns.

The best way to
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meet
these
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issues
would be to introduce taxation on
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private
cars' travelling and parking, and
also
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improve
the public
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transport
.
In other words
, if a better alternatives to car travelling could
be made
available to the public in terms of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
, safe, comfortable and convenient buses, trams and trains, and
also
by
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increasing
the routes to carry maximum passengers from all parts of the city,
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people
would
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love
to shift from
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private
cars to these facilities.
Moreover
,
further
taxation on
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private
car utility
as well
as an increase in parking fee would
also
discourage
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people
to
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use
personal vehicles. All these steps would
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help
solve the environmental and
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transport
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issues
of a country.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that
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increasing
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fuel
rates is not the solution of transportation and emission challenges,
rather
legislation to increase taxes on the
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use
of personal vehicle and availability of better alternatives would
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help
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controlling
these
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issues
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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