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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. 1WYA
Every nations has its own problems from traffic jam to pollution issues. Likewise, their governments also have special treatments and solutions to solve these problems. One of them is to control the price of gasolines in order to ease traffic jam and decrease pollution. This essay will provide evidences as well as reasons why I reckon that there are better solutions to this issues. To begin with, let us analize the benefits from increasing petrol's price. Firstly, it might reduce the number of cars and motorcycles due to the fact that they may not be able to afford an expensive gasoline. Additionaly, public transportations can be a better option for people that have less budget. Concequently, if the price of petrol increase, it will affect the environment for the better owing to the fact that fewer cars and motorcycles means less pollution. According to research, pollution contribute the most to citizen's health particullarly respiratory system. In contrast, the increasement of petrol's price can effect the price of essential goods and food resources to peak which may lead to more severe problem, for instance, economical crisis. As a matter of fact, Indonesia has experienced this before, however, the worse is in 1998 when Soeharto was the head of this country. Moreover, this also cause social inequality where the rich get richer and the poor get poorer. To summarize this essay, I believe that there are a lot of better options to prevent traffic and downgrade pollution problems. For instances, we can use public transportations or an ecofriendly transportation such as bicycle. In terms of the government, I suggest they should improve their public transportations in order to provide their populations a comfortable transportations. Henceforth, the government should think more about their citizens due to the fact that not all of them come from the same social class.
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its
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problems
from traffic jam to
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issues.
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, their
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governments
also
have special treatments and solutions to solve these
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problems
. One of them is to control the
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price
of
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gasolines
in order to
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ease
traffic jam and decrease
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pollution
. This essay will provide evidences
as well
as reasons why I reckon that there are
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better
solutions to
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this
issues.

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us
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analize
the benefits from increasing petrol's
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price
.
Firstly
, it might
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reduce
the number of cars and motorcycles due to the
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fact
that they may not be able to afford an expensive gasoline.
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Additionaly
, public
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transportations
can be a
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better
option for
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people
that have less budget.
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Concequently
, if the
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price
of petrol increase, it will affect the environment for the
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better
owing to the
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fact
that fewer cars and motorcycles means less
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pollution
. According to research,
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pollution
contribute the most to citizen's health
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particullarly
respiratory system.

In contrast
, the
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increasement
of petrol's
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price
can effect the
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price
of essential
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goods
and food resources to peak which may lead to more severe
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problem
,
for instance
,
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economical
crisis. As a matter of
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fact
, Indonesia has experienced this
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before
,
however
, the worse is in 1998 when
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Soeharto
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cause social inequality where the rich
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richer and the poor
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poorer.

To summarize
this essay, I believe that there are
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a lot of
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better
options to
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prevent
traffic and downgrade
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pollution
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problems
. For instances, we can
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use
public
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transportations
or an
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ecofriendly
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transportation
such as bicycle. In terms of the
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government
, I suggest they should
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improve
their public
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transportations
in order to provide their populations a comfortable
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transportations
. Henceforth, the
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government
should
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think
more about their citizens due to the
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fact
that not all of them
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come
from the same social
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class
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
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