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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.17

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 17
In today’s world, traffic and pollution are a huge obstacle to overcome in every nation. Despite the claims of some, I feel that an increase in the cost of petrol is certainly not a better method to deal with such issues. This essay explains why this is a bad idea and suggests possible alternative measures. Increasing the petrol price burdens the citizens in an enormous way, especially to the ones those who earn a low income. This approach only limits their freedom to travel as the transportation cost might also increase. In India, for instance, everything relies on transport and the revenue of the country is mostly dependent on it. This income will be disturbed if people cannot afford to pay for the fuel. Make sure you. Clearly, this is not a viable solution to the pollution and traffic issues. There are other ways to resolve these complications. The government should encourage carpools and improve the public transportation. People should be aware of different ways they can travel together, thereby not causing any kind of traffic issue. Canada, for example, is encouraging their citizens to utilize carpools whenever possible. This way, the number of vehicles allowed on a congested road can be controlled. People will start using public transport when the amenities are improved. So, the authorities should take a step towards it. As a result, less carbon dioxide will be released into the air thereby reducing the pollution. If these procedures are strictly followed by everyone, then the nations can see great results in eradicating the traffic congestion and having a pollution-free environment. In conclusion, instead of increasing the price of the fuels, other measures like improving transportation facilities and promoting carpooling should be encouraged in order to overcome the traffic and pollution issues.
In
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today
’s world,
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traffic
and
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pollution
are a huge obstacle to overcome in every nation. Despite the claims of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
, I feel that an increase in the cost of petrol is
certainly
not a better method to deal with such issues. This essay
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explains
why this is a
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bad
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idea
and suggests possible alternative measures.

Increasing the petrol price burdens the citizens in an enormous
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way
,
especially
to the ones those who earn a low income. This approach
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
limits their freedom to travel as the transportation cost might
also
increase. In India,
for instance
, everything relies on transport and the revenue of the country is
mostly
dependent on it. This income will
be disturbed
if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
cannot afford to pay for the fuel.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Make
sure you.
Clearly
, this is not a viable solution to the
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pollution
and
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traffic
issues.

There are other
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ways
to resolve these complications. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should encourage carpools and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the public transportation.
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People
should be aware of
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different
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ways
they can travel together, thereby not causing any kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
issue. Canada,
for example
, is encouraging their citizens to utilize carpools whenever possible. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
, the number of vehicles
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allowed
on a congested road can
be controlled
.
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People
will
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start
using public transport when the amenities are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
.
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So
, the authorities should take a step towards it.
As a result
, less carbon dioxide will
be released
into the air thereby reducing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
. If these procedures are
strictly
followed by everyone, then the nations can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
great results in eradicating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion and having a pollution-free environment.

In conclusion
,
instead
of increasing the price of the fuels, other measures like improving transportation facilities and promoting carpooling should
be encouraged
in order to overcome the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
issues.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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