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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage from using their cars? v.10

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage from using their cars? v. 10
Transportation is very essential for commuters to travel from one place to another. Nowadays, owning a automobile is very common for commuters who lives in the city. Thirty years ago, owning a motor was possible only for rich people, but currently we can clearly see the flourish improvement in buying new cars. Some people concern that it might create more transportation issues, whereas other opinion that regime should bring some restriction to minimise the usage of own cars. To begin with, a three-decades years ago, the people who had power could have own cars to show their status in the community. But the current trend has completely changed, even the average salary holder could buy an automobile in the method of EMI (an equated monthly instalment). Moreover, the company has offered various discounts and people can easily afford to buy a car at cheap price. Because of that, people should have more and more cars in their showcase so it causes considerable damage to the nation in the way of traffic jam. For example, if the company has offered half price on a car, the buying of cars should be more and more and most people are started avoiding government transport, they would like to use own cars it causes a massive transportation problems in the community. On the contrary, ministry should bring a massive restriction to control over traffic problems at the same time they have to focus on the innovative ideas to attract commuters' attention. Because if the government provides a free bus - pass to every citizen, it would have possibility to grab people's attention towards state transportation. For example, if the authority to increase the toll charges as well as petrol, it will have a chance to reduce the usage of own cars. In conclusion, it is true that nowadays the usage of cars is getting more and more so it creates a massive problem in the community, although it has the possibility to control over the problems as power should take certain steps to overcome these issues.
Transportation
is
very
essential for commuters to travel from one place to another. Nowadays, owning
a
automobile is
very
common for commuters who
lives
in the city. Thirty years ago, owning a motor was possible
only
for rich
people
,
but
currently
we can
clearly
see
the flourish improvement in buying new
cars
.
Some
people
concern that it might create more
transportation
issues, whereas other opinion that regime should bring
some
restriction to
minimise
the usage of
own
cars.

To
begin
with, a three-decades years ago, the
people
who had power could have
own
cars
to
show
their status in the community.
But
the
current
trend has completely
changed
, even the average salary holder could
buy
an automobile in the method of EMI (an equated monthly
instalment
).
Moreover
, the
company
has offered various discounts and
people
can
easily
afford to
buy
a
car
at
cheap
price.
Because
of that,
people
should have more and more
cars
in their showcase
so
it causes considerable damage to the nation in the way of traffic jam.
For example
, if the
company
has offered half price on a
car
, the buying of
cars
should be more and more and most
people
are
started
avoiding
government
transport, they would like to
use
own
cars
it causes a massive
transportation
problems
in the community.

On the contrary
, ministry should bring a massive restriction to control over traffic
problems
at the same time they
have to
focus on the innovative
ideas
to attract commuters' attention.
Because
if the
government
provides a free bus
-
pass to every citizen, it would have possibility to grab
people
's attention towards state
transportation
.
For example
, if the authority to increase the toll charges
as well
as petrol, it will have a chance to
reduce
the usage of
own
cars.

In conclusion
, it is true that nowadays the usage of
cars
is getting more and more
so
it creates a massive
problem
in the community, although it has the possibility to control over the
problems
as power should take certain steps to overcome these issues.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam’. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage from using their cars? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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