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increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school

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large number of learners are going to university rather than working after high school. it has advantages and disadvantages both views. on one side, after graduation the students available for white callor jobs. Degrees areopened the door for better emploments. It is developed rare prusnelity. Itis become the good ledership which used in the life. For example, a same hospital, a doctor has monthly income is $10, 00 instead a cleaner is earned very less salary. On other side, Degrees are not important for jobs. Many companies are hired workers without any diploma. Some people has own bussinesses. For instant, a driver have no degree but has only a lisence and just he know how to drive any vehicles. At the end, my opinionis the degree is best option for high payment job. Students should go to university for degree, and make their bright future.
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large
number of learners are going to university
rather
than working after high school.
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it
has advantages and disadvantages both views.
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on
one side, after graduation the students available for white
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callor
jobs.
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Degrees
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areopened
the door for better
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emploments
. It
is developed
rare
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prusnelity
.
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become the
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good
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ledership
which
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used
in the life.
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, a same hospital, a doctor has monthly income is $10, 00
instead
a cleaner
is earned
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very
less salary. On other side,
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Degrees
are not
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important
for jobs.
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Many
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companies
are hired
workers without any diploma.
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people
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has
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own
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bussinesses
. For instant, a driver have no
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degree
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but
has
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only
a
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lisence
and
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he
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know
how to drive any vehicles. At the
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end
, my
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opinionis
the
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degree
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option for high payment job. Students should go to university for
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degree
, and
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make
their bright future.
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IELTS essay increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
145 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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