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Increasing global has lead to the use of many items, including everyday items, produced in other countries which must be transported long distances. To what extent do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Increasing global has lead to the use of many items, including everyday items, produced in other countries which must be transported long distances. ORPbN
Day by day, fast-changing in the work, as a result a high demand of using is more and more elevated so an export trend is seen ascend continually even though the goods has to be transported over many countries. Some people think it is not a problem, by contrast other people don’t think so. This essay will be discussed in both of view. To begin with, consuming goods in outside countries can lead to fewer labour opportunities for local people. As manufactures company are located in other countries which causes hundred of manual labours jobs are work fire. In addition, in the case of a pandemic, goods can not be transported to the country of destination, there will be a lack of product needed to cover the demand. Although some companies would still operate and try to deliver the products, some international borders could be close and the goods might not be able to be transported. For example, in the covid 19 disease peak at, some brands was not able to export day to day items such as Zara which is a clothes brands from Spanish, being delay and exporting slowly the number of clothing because the demand of people have some significant changes in lifestyle. On the other hand, despite the outlined drawbacks, moving goods across countries helps generate a certain degree of revenue for the exporting nation and people can be able to improve quality of life with various kinds of goods. Furthermore, some countries may be due to climate and environmental differences. It is essential to allow imported goods so this will avail the natives opportunity to explore other international products which are not produced in own country. To sum up, it is evident that countries should develop and build up the quality of life of its members. Although transporting goods from other countries has its own important, I think disadvantages are overweigh than advantages.
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a high demand of using is more and more elevated
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so
an export trend is
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seen
ascend
continually
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goods
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has to
be transported
over
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many
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countries
.
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Some
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people
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think
it is not a problem, by contrast
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other
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people
don’t
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think
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so
. This essay will
be discussed
in both of view.

To
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begin
with, consuming
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goods
in outside
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countries
can lead to fewer
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labour
opportunities for local
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people
.
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manufactures
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company
are located
in
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other
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countries
which causes
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hundred
of manual
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labours
jobs are work fire.
In addition
, in the case of a pandemic,
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goods
can not
be transported
to the
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country
of destination, there will be
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a lack of product
needed to cover the demand. Although
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some
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companies
would
still
operate and try to deliver the products,
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some
international borders could be close and the
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goods
might not be able to
be transported
.
For example
, in the
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covid 19
disease peak at,
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some
brands was not able to export day to day items such as Zara which is a clothes brands from Spanish, being delay and exporting
slowly
the number of clothing
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because
the demand of
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people
have
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some
significant
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changes
in lifestyle.

On the
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other
hand, despite the outlined drawbacks, moving
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goods
across
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countries
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helps
generate a certain degree of revenue for the exporting nation and
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people
can be able to
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improve
quality of life with various kinds of
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goods
.
Furthermore
,
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some
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countries
may be due to climate and environmental differences. It is essential to
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allow
imported
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goods
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so
this

will avail the natives opportunity to explore
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other
international products which are not produced in
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own
country.

To sum up, it is evident that
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countries
should develop and build up the quality of life of its members. Although transporting
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goods
from
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other
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countries
has its
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own
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important
, I
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think
disadvantages are
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overweigh
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IELTS essay Increasing global has lead to the use of many items, including everyday items, produced in other countries which must be transported long distances.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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