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Increasing Gap between rich and poor

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The differences between wealthy people and poor is increasing day by day. The main cause for this could be poor person lacking behind because of incomplete education, less knowledge and no experience. There are many solutions that can help to tackle this important issue. Firstly, the most critical cause behind this gap between rich and poor is because of education. Mostly the rich people or successfull people are very well educated and qualified and have a stupendous experience in whichever field they are working at present. Meanwhile poor person is poor because of insufficient studies, not even ever been to their schools and not qualified. These circumstances hamper them from greater opportunites to achieve success and compel them to do small works to make their livelihood, to survive. Sometimes there are several other reasons also which we call as our luck, our destiny. Sometimes poor people are also highly qualified, educated but even though they do not get opportunities chances to prove themselves what they are capable of doing. In contrast of it some wealthy people are also there who are not professionals, don't hold degrees but they are at that position because of their luck and what the wealth they had inherited from their familiies. There are many effective solutions to fulfill this gap between rich and poor is to make education compulsory for everyone at a tender age and also introduce poors with many more modern passive ideas to earn good income. initiating some more schemes for poor to have equal opportuinites as rich. It is not important to give priviliges to privileged people but it is important to offer ample opportunitites to inferior ones. In conclusion, providing greater and equal opportunities to both the sections will definitely help to reduce the increasing gap between both the sections of society.
The differences between wealthy
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and
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poor
is increasing day by day. The main cause for this could be
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poor
person lacking behind
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because
of incomplete education, less knowledge and no experience. There are
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many
solutions that can
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help
to tackle this
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important
issue.
Firstly
, the most critical cause behind this gap between
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rich
and
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poor
is
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because
of education.
Mostly
the
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rich
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people
or
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successfull
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people
are
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very
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well educated
and qualified and have a stupendous experience in whichever field they are working at present.
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Meanwhile
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poor
person is
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poor
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because
of insufficient studies, not even ever been to their schools and not qualified. These circumstances hamper them from greater
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opportunites
to achieve success and compel them to do
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small
works to
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make
their livelihood, to survive.
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Sometimes
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also
which we call as our luck, our destiny.
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Sometimes
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poor
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people
are
also
highly
qualified, educated
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but
even though
they do not
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get
opportunities chances to prove themselves what they are capable of doing. In
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contrast
of it
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some
wealthy
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people
are
also
there who are not professionals, don't hold degrees
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but
they are at that position
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because
of their luck and what the wealth they had inherited from their
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familiies
. There are
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many
effective solutions to fulfill this gap between
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rich
and
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poor
is to
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make
education compulsory for everyone at a tender age and
also
introduce
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poors
with
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many
more modern passive
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ideas
to earn
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good
income.
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initiating
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some
more schemes for
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poor
to have equal
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opportuinites
as
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rich
. It is not
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important
to give
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priviliges
to privileged
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people
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it is
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to offer ample
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opportunitites
to inferior ones.
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, providing greater and equal opportunities to both the sections will definitely
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help
to
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reduce
the increasing gap between both the sections of society.
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IELTS essay Increasing Gap between rich and poor

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  American English
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