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" How to choose a successful career"

" How to choose a successful career" WERKk
Throughout the existence of mankind, humans indicate tremendous effort and perseverance to evolve their career path. However, here is the question that, which method enables us to acquire career accomplishments. I am a strong advocate that the most important two considerations of deciding on a successful career are being punctual in identifying your area of interest and the competitiveness of qualification. Firstly, recognizing your incentives and genuinely desired occupations is the most problematic phase of choosing any career. More and more youngsters have plenty of difficulties in that stage which turns out the main root cause of the failed career down the line. Moreover, based on the scientific research was conducted by UK scholars, having a lack of eagerness to their occupation hinders them from coming into possession of thriving career opportunities, albeit distinguished education. Owing to the continual attempts of the society and government's alliance including, enhancement of people`s consciousness about their further specialty choice, diverse kind of training, seminar and etc. have an immense amount of influence on tackling with these sorts of matter. On the other hand, there is by no means certain that you will be able to be outstanding in any field if you are deeply sure that this is a job of your life, the reality of the competitive work world does not confirm it too. Most people come across the trouble, namely, being out of work because of their pointless profession which innovation in technology substitutes labor of humans. A clear example of this is the survey was carried out at the University of Iceland which demonstrates that 48% of the graduates have a useless profession. To get rid of this variety of jobs, investigation of work world`s demand certainly would be far more beneficial in the first place. Overall, to possessing a successful career, people should realize the importance of the verdict about their prospective trade and its consequences. As a result, our choices on career play a vital role and determine whether we will barely survive with the detrimental effect of this decision or be proud of it. will barely survive with detrimental effect of this decision or be proud of it.
Throughout the existence of mankind, humans indicate tremendous effort and perseverance to evolve their
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career
path.
However
, here is the question that, which method enables us to acquire
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career
accomplishments. I am a strong advocate that the most
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important
two considerations of deciding on a successful
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career
are being punctual in identifying your area of interest and the competitiveness of qualification.

Firstly
, recognizing your incentives and
genuinely
desired occupations is the most problematic phase of choosing any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
. More and more youngsters have
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plenty
of difficulties in that stage which turns out the main root cause of the failed
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career
down the line.
Moreover
, based on the scientific research
was conducted
by UK scholars, having a lack of eagerness to their occupation hinders them from coming into possession of thriving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
opportunities, albeit distinguished education. Owing to the continual attempts of the society and
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government
's alliance including, enhancement of
The character between 'people' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "people’s" (curly apostrophe) or "people's" (straight apostrophe).
people`s
consciousness about their
further
specialty choice, diverse kind of training, seminar
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and etc
. have an immense amount of influence on tackling with these sorts of matter.

On the other hand
, there is by no means certain that you will be able to be outstanding in any field if you are
deeply
sure that this is a job of your life, the reality of the competitive work world does not confirm it too. Most
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people
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come
across the trouble,
namely
, being out of work
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because
of their pointless profession which innovation in technology substitutes labor of humans. A
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clear
example of this is the survey
was carried
out at the University of Iceland which demonstrates that 48% of the graduates have a useless profession. To
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get
rid of this variety of jobs, investigation of work
The character between 'world' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "world’s" (curly apostrophe) or "world's" (straight apostrophe).
world`s
demand
certainly
would be far more beneficial in the
first
place.

Overall
, to possessing a successful
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career
,
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people
should realize the importance of the verdict about their prospective trade and its consequences.
As a result
, our choices on
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career
play a vital role and determine whether we will
barely
survive with the detrimental effect of this decision or be proud of it. will
barely
survive with detrimental effect of this decision or be proud of it.
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IELTS essay " How to choose a successful career"

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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