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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree? v.8

Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 8
It has been observed in recent years that the number of adults using cars as a daily transport mode is increasing. Hence, this has caused many problems, especially in large cities such as accidents and pollution. So, it has been proposed that excluding private vehicles from city centre may help to reduce this issue. In my opinion, I believe that it is very essential to adopt public transport as the only mode in the city centre. On one hand, many people are moving from the countryside to the larger cities for different purposes such as working and studying. As a result, the number of cars is increasing and thus accidents are becoming more frequent, which is very dangerous. For example, it is known that people drive fast in the morning to be at work which reduce their reaction time while driving. On the other hand, pollution in one of the main concerns of modern large cities affecting the public health. Cars and transportation in general are enlarging this problem. The chemical released into the air from cars, especially in traffic, is very harmful for health. For example, it has been released by the US, that New York city air in very polluted due to fact that 85% or the NY population are using their personal vehicle every day. In conclusion, reducing the number of vehicles circulating in the streets is very an important step toward solving transport related problems in large cities sand there are undoubtedly many benefits to having such thing in any society.
It has
been observed
in recent years that the number of adults using
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cars
as a daily transport mode is increasing.
Hence
, this has caused
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many
problems,
especially
in large
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cities
such as accidents and pollution.
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So
, it has
been proposed
that excluding private vehicles from city
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centre
may
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help
to
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reduce
this issue. In my opinion, I believe that it is
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very
essential to adopt public transport as the
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only
mode in the city
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centre
.

On one hand,
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many
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people
are moving from the countryside to the larger
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cities
for
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different
purposes such as working and studying.
As a result
, the number of
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cars
is increasing and
thus
accidents are becoming more frequent, which is
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very
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dangerous
.
For example
, it
is known
that
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people
drive
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fast
in the morning to be at work which
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reduce
their reaction time while driving.

On the other hand
, pollution in one of the main concerns of modern large
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cities
affecting the public health.
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Cars
and transportation
in general
are enlarging this problem. The chemical released into the air from
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cars
,
especially
in traffic, is
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very
harmful for health.
For example
, it has
been released
by the US, that
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New York city
air in
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very
polluted due to fact that 85% or the NY population are using their personal vehicle every day.

In conclusion
, reducing the number of vehicles circulating in the streets is
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very
an
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important
step toward solving transport related problems in large
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cities
sand there are
undoubtedly
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many
benefits to having such thing in any society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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