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Secondly, to increase the number of priority seats will certainly not help promote a culture of care on public transport, but instead lead to more conflicts. Priority seats are widely regarded as seats exclusively reserved for those in need. These seats are treated as sacred and inviolable. Commuters can be wary of occupying priority seats as they may confront disapproving looks or even worse in some cases the nearby passengers may snapshot them without any decent explanation and online bullying takes place. On the other hand, empty priority seats during rush hours are highlighted by online videos since young people are afraid of being reprimanded for sitting on them. Commuters will be more heed of occupying these even if they need to sit down. Indeed, this is a conflict to the original notion to the courtesy on public transport. We believe that increasing the number of priority seats will make the situation worse.
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to increase the number of
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a culture of care on public transport,

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lead to more conflicts.

Priority
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widely
regarded as

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seats
exclusively reserved for those in need. These
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are treated
as
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sacred


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and
inviolable.

Commuters can be wary of

occupying
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priority
seats

as they may confront disapproving looks

or even worse in
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some
cases

the nearby passengers may snapshot them without any decent explanation

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and
online bullying takes place.

On the other hand
,

empty
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priority
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seats
during rush hours

are highlighted
by online videos

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since
young
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people
are afraid of
being reprimanded
for sitting on them.

Commuters will be more heed of occupying these even if they need to sit down.

Indeed
, this is a conflict to the original notion to the courtesy on public transport.

We believe that increasing the number of
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priority
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seats
will
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make
the situation worse.

IELTS essay increase the number of priority seats

Essay
  American English
21 paragraphs
153 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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